Talk:The Race Against Time/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 09:50, 25 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

"who has to go to six continents" - venture is more formal
"and raise flags to begin the 1988 Sport Aid." - please clarify what the 1988 Sport Aid was to the uninformed
"Codemasters' unauthorised" - shouldn't it be zed for consistency?

"The goal of the game is to raise a flag and light a torch bowl in six continents in five in-game hours," - over
"In side-scrolling game screens, he runs past landmarks such as" - the player
"He travels between screens by using airplanes" - same issue as above
"Each continent have unique environmental hazards to avoid," - has or contains
" Letting the time run out would also cause the game to end. Collecting hourglasses would increase the amount of time left." - consider merging and reworking some to improve the flow rather than an almost CV-based stacatto
"beginnging the 1988 Sport Aid." - typo; should be beginning

"The Race Against Time was designed by the Oliver Twins, Andrew and Philip Oliver. The game was developed and published by Codemasters." - how about merging these two sentences and shortening them accordingly?
"on May 7th, 1988." - the date format should be changed to May 7, 1988 per MOS:DATE
"The game was released in 1988 for the Amstrad CPC, Commodore 64, and ZX Spectrum computers." - this sentence requires a reliable source to verify it
"However, after the game had been released, Owens’s estate objected." - think you want to clarify what Owens' state objected to an image of him on the game cover
"from the estate to use Owens's likeness, and the estate declined to grant permission retroactively." - repetition of the word "estate"

The parentheses in the CVG column in the table to the right should have a space added to the left of the scores
"Zzap!64 reviewed the Commodore 64 version, describing it as "abysmal". The magazine also criticized the controls for being too awkward." - consider merging the two sentences together and making it more concise
"In December 1988, Code Masters" - Codemasters

Will place the review on hold to allow the nominator time to respond/query the points raised above. MWright96 (talk) 05:08, 26 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]