Talk:The Perfect Mate/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Aoba47 (talk · contribs) 03:46, 26 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]

A very solid article on a very interesting episode. I will have my comments up in a few days. Aoba47 (talk) 03:46, 26 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]

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Replace the “so” in the phrase “so used by the writer in protest against re-writes” with “who”.
I think “which was loved by the viewer in order for the episode to work” should be changed to “which would be loved by the viewer in order for the episode to work”
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If possible, could specify what role she played on Fathers and Sons?
I understand what you mean by the following phrase (“which she found difficult due to her spoken English at the time”), but something about it sounds awkward to me, so I would recommend revising it. The phrase “her spoken English at the time” could be replaced with “her lack of fluency in English at the time” or something similar.
I would suggest combining the second and third paragraph of the “Reception” section and revise the topic sentence to discuss the negative reaction to the representation of Kamala. I suggest that the topic sentence be changed as Keith DeCandido is not a female fan.
I would give a topic sentence to the final paragraph of the same section, to introduce that the paragraph is focused on the positive reception of the show. I would suggest placing this paragraph directly after the first paragraph as I am more accustomed to starting with the positive critique and going to the negative, and going from the more broad critiques to the more specific ones.

@Miyagawa: Great job with the article! Once my comments have been addressed, I will pass this. If possible could you review my nomination for "Faces"? Aoba47 (talk) 15:10, 26 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@Aoba47: Thanks for the review, I think I've taken a look at everything now. The first topic sentence wasn't deliberate, but I've worked one into the paragraph after it, as well as the one for the final paragraph in that section. Happy to review "Faces" - it's one of my favourite first season episodes - I watched it to death on VHS back in the day that it was the quickest way of seeing Voyager in the UK. Miyagawa (talk) 20:24, 26 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@Miyagawa: Again, great job on the article as always! This is a definite ✓ Pass. Your work on here is very inspiring so I am glad that I can learn from your work. I really enjoyed "Faces" too, and it is actually one of my favorite episodes from the series as a whole. Kind of makes me sad that Torres did not get as much attention as the series went on though. Aoba47 (talk) 21:15, 26 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]

I think Voyager did that to several characters - I remember when writing up the Harry Kim article, about half the episode mentions are from the first season and a half. Unfortunately when they did do Torres, they always went back to the Klingon stuff (I remember a quite dreadful Klingon afterlife episode) instead of letting her be her own character. It's a shame as she came across at the start as a Klingon Spock, and one of the far more interesting characters. Miyagawa (talk) 21:25, 26 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@Miyagawa: I agree with you. The series definitely seemed to focus on Janeway, Seven of Nine, and The Doctor at the expense of the other characters. I am thinking of expanding the episodes related to Torres (and possibly her article as well) and hopefully get a few of them to the level of a GA as I always like her character for some reason. Aoba47 (talk) 22:41, 26 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]