Talk:The Magical Worlds of Harry Potter/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: The Flash ^{talk} 02:55, 2 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Hiya. I caught this quaint little article while sifting through GAN, and it's a sure-fire pass for GA. I'll be conducting the review in the manner of Talk:I Married Marge/GA1. Let's start. :) The Flash ^{talk} 02:55, 2 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]

"Colbert explains in the introduction of his book[...]" → "[...]of the book[...]" as to not confuse readers that you're talking about a different book.
- Done The leftorium 11:49, 2 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]
There's some times where it strays from "he explains" to "he commented," so please pick one tense to stick with.
- Done The leftorium 11:49, 2 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Please explain that his nephew and nieces are children before you refer to them as "the children."
- Done The leftorium 11:49, 2 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]
Wikilink to Harry Potter and the Philosopher's Stone.
- Done The leftorium 11:49, 2 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]
Perhaps change "[...]began to notice mythology references in the book" to "[...]notice mythological references[...]"
- Done The leftorium 11:49, 2 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]
Can you merge the second and third sentences in the last paragraph?
- Done The leftorium 11:49, 2 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]

~~Same as above—work with fixing tenses to be consistent.~~
- Not done What parts are you referring to? The leftorium 11:49, 2 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  - Never mind, after another read, the issues I had with that are to minor to count. The Flash ^{talk} 17:27, 2 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]
"The Magical Worlds of Harry Potter has been praised for learning children about literature and history" → "[...]praised for teaching children[...]"
- Done The leftorium 11:49, 2 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]
Please give a brief explanation about the Narnia book, like what you said about the Lord of the Rings one.
- Done The leftorium 11:49, 2 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Can you add one of these images? From what I can tell, book FU images are like those of films and video games: infobox images are perfectly fine to use for identification purposes.
- I don't feel an infobox image is useful here. The leftorium 17:35, 2 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  - Any particular reason, though? The Flash ^{talk} 18:31, 2 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]
    - I just don't see why we should use a non-free image in this article when it's not useful. The leftorium 18:46, 2 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]
      - It is useful—identification purposes. The Flash ^{talk} 19:52, 2 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]
        People can identify the book by reading the text, IMO. The leftorium 19:55, 2 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]
        
        The people at WP:NFC seemed okay with it so I've added the cover art. I can't come up with any ALT text for it so feel free to do that yourself if you think it's necessary for GA. The leftorium 21:12, 2 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]
        Alright, thanks; I've added ALT text for you. The Flash ^{talk} 03:21, 3 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]
Both images are fine—but can you please add some ALT text?
- Done The leftorium 11:49, 2 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]

To be done when above issues are taken care of.

GA review (see here for criteria)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:
Nice work! I'm going ahead and passing it. Thanks for your diligence throughout. :) The Flash ^{talk} 03:25, 3 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you very much for the review! :) The leftorium 10:52, 3 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]