Talk:The Level, Brighton/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 13:20, 21 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

" south coast of the United Kingdom." yet infobox has it Brighton, England.
- made it England Mujinga (talk) 08:02, 23 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
No need to link major geographical entities like United Kingdom (if it stays).
- ok, England not linked Mujinga (talk) 08:02, 23 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"for huge dinner " huge isn't particularly enecylopedic in tone.
- we are talking over 7,000 people so i feel "huge" is justified, but i could change to "large-scale" as in the text if you prefer Mujinga (talk) 08:02, 23 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  - I don't doubt the magnitude, just the tone. large-scale works for me. The Rambling Man (Stay indoors, stay safe!!!!) 08:41, 23 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
    - changed Mujinga (talk) 10:35, 23 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"cafés" no accent required, we've appropriated that word in English for some while now.
- in British English I would argue either is fine
  - Well cafe is about ten times more prevalent and I'm not sure why we'd opt for a non-English variant. The Rambling Man (Stay indoors, stay safe!!!!) 08:41, 23 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
    - i'm not sure if it's exactly how i see it but Cafe (British) makes a distinction between café and cafe/greasyspoon/caff. Wikipedia:Diacritical marks (only an essay, not MoS) says both versions are ok Mujinga (talk) 10:35, 23 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Non-breaking space before ellipsis.
- fixed, i think Mujinga (talk) 08:21, 23 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  - fixed better now Mujinga (talk) 10:35, 23 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"on the Steine " overlinked.
- fixed Mujinga (talk) 08:21, 23 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"in 1787, The Level " etc surely "the Level" per "the Beatles" etc.
- yes this was a recent edit which felt a bit odd, i was unsure here since sources like the council use "The Level", looking around I don't see any hard and fast rule here on wikipedia so changed to "the" Mujinga (talk) 08:02, 23 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"50 years" personally would prefer fifty here.
- per MOS:NUMERAL both versions are ok Mujinga (talk) 08:21, 23 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  - I know, but I'm just saying the numeral jars the flow. The Rambling Man (Stay indoors, stay safe!!!!) 08:41, 23 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
    - yes true, coming soon after "four years later" i see what you mean, i've rejigged and lost the 50 Mujinga (talk) 10:35, 23 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"Formation and history" section heading, perhaps "early history" (as you have "recent history")
- that works! Mujinga (talk) 08:21, 23 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"King George IV " overlinked.
- fixed Mujinga (talk) 08:02, 23 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
" the 8 acres" eight.
- officially 8.05 so changed to that for consistency Mujinga (talk) 08:02, 23 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"nowadays" doesn't feel encyclopedic in tone.
- yes, changed to "today" Mujinga (talk) 08:02, 23 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Park Crescent is overlinked.
- fixed Mujinga (talk) 08:02, 23 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
" Victoria " overlinked.
- off with his head! fixed Mujinga (talk) 08:02, 23 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"Old Steine" overlinked (and suddenly Old)
- fixed as above Mujinga (talk) 08:21, 23 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"scenes ... were" non-breaking space between scenes & ellipsis.
- done, such a great quote! Mujinga (talk) 08:21, 23 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
" mid- to late 19th" if you hyphenate mid, shouldn't you hyphenate late-?
- agreed, then had a look around, seems fine for both to be unhyphenated Mujinga (talk) 08:02, 23 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
" playground " overlinked.
- fixed Mujinga (talk) 08:02, 23 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
National Cycle route and buses mentioned in the infobox are not mentioned at all in the prose.
- added to overview section Mujinga (talk) 08:21, 23 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"on September 1, 1984." date format inconsistent.
- oops, fixed Mujinga (talk) 08:02, 23 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"and The Levellers" -> "and the Levellers"
- fixed Mujinga (talk) 08:02, 23 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
" skatepark " overlinked
- it's linked in intro, overview and skatepark, so strictly the third mention should go but i'd like to keep it so skatepark is linked in its own section Mujinga (talk) 08:02, 23 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  - Ok, no worries. The Rambling Man (Stay indoors, stay safe!!!!) 08:41, 23 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"an elm tree" ditto, as is "Dutch elm disease".
- fixed Mujinga (talk) 08:02, 23 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
" boccia and pétanque" both.
- fixed Mujinga (talk) 08:02, 23 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Could link sensory garden.
- done Mujinga (talk) 08:02, 23 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Avoid SHOUTING in ref titles.
- FIXED Mujinga (talk) 08:02, 23 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Spaced hyphen in ref titles should be spaced en-dashes.
- sorry could you give me an example? i'm not sure what this refers to Mujinga (talk) 08:21, 23 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  - " LUC - Environmental " should be " LUC – Environmental " for example. The Rambling Man (Stay indoors, stay safe!!!!) 08:41, 23 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
    - thanks, fixed for LUC and Cowley refs Mujinga (talk) 10:35, 23 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
The single note could easily be integrated into the main prose.
- good point, done Mujinga (talk) 08:21, 23 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

That's it for a first run through, so it's on hold. The Rambling Man (Stay indoors, stay safe!!!!) 14:15, 22 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Hi The Rambling Man thanks for the comments, I've addressed them all and queried a few. Mujinga (talk) 08:26, 23 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Mujinga responses above. Cheers. The Rambling Man (Stay indoors, stay safe!!!!) 08:41, 23 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
The Rambling Man replied, i wish i could go for to a greasy spoon for an allday breakfast now Mujinga (talk) 10:37, 23 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
You and me both! Stay safe. The Rambling Man (Stay indoors, stay safe!!!!) 10:41, 23 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Bingo, good work, not going to die on a hill for cafe, so I'm happy to promote this, nice piece of work. Well done. The Rambling Man (Stay indoors, stay safe!!!!) 10:37, 23 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Great! Thanks for the review, see you down at the Level when the pandemic is finally over :) Mujinga (talk) 12:25, 23 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]