Talk:The Glass Ballerina/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Queenieacoustic (talk) 11:33, 11 June 2011 (UTC)

Comments

Flashbacks

1. "who will be fired by her father," "who is later fired" sounds better to me.
2. Why is "stealing" and "put an end to" in quotes in the article?
3. "But when Jin ambushes and beats up Jae, he still cannot bring himself to kill, and instead orders Jae to leave the country." Slightly clumsy. Write "him" after "kill," and replace the second mention of Jae with "him" as well.

Production

1. The first sentence of the third paragraph needs a reference, as it ends with a direct quote.

Reception

1. "When the episode first aired..." To eliminate confusion, replace "the episode" with the episode's title.
2. Remember to use single quotations (') when a quote is used inside a quote. (this occurs in the last review of the second paragraph)

Lead

1. "on the Island they and Sayid attempt..." Add a comma after "Island."
2. "believed it inferior..." Add "was" after "it."

In conclusion

While there are some minor issues, the article looks very good overall and it is very close to GA status. I'll put the article on hold for seven days so that the necessary fixes can be made. Good luck! Queenieacoustic (talk) 11:33, 11 June 2011 (UTC)

All fixed! Thanks for the review! :) Ruby2010 comment! 19:12, 11 June 2011 (UTC)

Passed. Nice work! Queenieacoustic (talk) 19:16, 11 June 2011 (UTC)