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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 13:44, 24 May 2015 (UTC)
If you like, I could review the rest of the 1910 films you have at GAN... JAGUAR 13:44, 24 May 2015 (UTC)
Initial comments
[edit]- "silent short drama produced" - silent short drama film produced
- Fixed. ChrisGualtieri (talk) 15:40, 24 May 2015 (UTC)
- "The family is reunited thirty year later" - years
- Fixed. ChrisGualtieri (talk) 15:40, 24 May 2015 (UTC)
- "comes [n]orth with her brother" - why is there a bracket in north? Doesn't seem to make sense here
- It is capital N. Fixed. ChrisGualtieri (talk) 15:40, 24 May 2015 (UTC)
- "and there becomes commander of [a] GAR post" - same here, not sure why it's here either
- This here is for clarity. The text reads "becomes commander of GAR post" and you need "a" because there are many GAR posts and this addition needs to be notes as it is not in the original text. ChrisGualtieri (talk) 15:40, 24 May 2015 (UTC)
- "The film director is unknown, but it may have been Barry O'Neil" - is this in one of the sources given? It's just that this sentence is missing a citation
- There are no absolutely known credits for the director, however according to Bowers we know that O'Neil was present at the time and one of two directors whilst the other had left already. ChrisGualtieri (talk) 15:40, 24 May 2015 (UTC)
On hold
[edit]Just minor stuff. I'll leave this on hold for the standard seven days JAGUAR 13:52, 24 May 2015 (UTC)
- @Jaguar: - Commented in response, other issues fixed. ChrisGualtieri (talk) 15:40, 24 May 2015 (UTC)
- Thank you for your responses and clarifying that GAR quote too, this article is now good to go. If you're still active I can review the other 1910 films over time if you like? JAGUAR 17:50, 24 May 2015 (UTC)
- @Jaguar: - Commented in response, other issues fixed. ChrisGualtieri (talk) 15:40, 24 May 2015 (UTC)