Talk:The Field Where I Died/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: TBrandley (talk · contribs) 17:14, 2 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Glad to see you working on The X-Files again. Well done! TBr and ley 18:24, 2 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

"aired" clarify that it is its original airing
Only have Monster-of-the-Week linked itself, without the outside "" quote marks
Only Fox should be linked, without network
"The episode", then the next sentence uses "This episode". Change "This episode" to "It"
"clearly details" clearly doesn't represent a neutral point of view. Remove, unless a reliable source can be found stating so.
"of their series" can explain what type of show that is, assuming that the person reading this article doesn't click on that link?
""The Field Where I Died" received mixed to positive reviews from television critics. Many praised the episode's exploration of loss and grief as well as Cloke's acting." Merge all that into one, perhaps?
Per WP:TVPLOT, maybe some none important details can be cut down, it should be "200 to 500 words", but I'm not sure what it is there in plot section
"anonymous caller" that whole sentence confuses me, his name is "Sydney", so how can he be "anonymous"?
"Assistant Director" Director shouldn't be in capitals, as per MOS:CAPS
"Mulder and Scully question Ephesian", the next sentence also uses "question", can something different be found, as it being used so close isn't idealiy
Link President of the United States per WP:UNDERLINK
"says" could be changed to "claimed" or something, sometimes
"the Smoking Man" to "The Smoking Man", with capitals, for MOS:CAPS, as that is his "character" name
"appears" is that neutral, or is that opinion, from this sentence "it appears that Melissa is his soulmate who is always separated from him"
"created" to "developed"
"Eighteen" should be "18" per WP:MOSNUM
"only to find" remove only per WP:NPOV
"premiered" to "originally aired"
"extremely negative" remove extremely per WP:NPOV
Wasn't the consensus for The X-Files Wiki link to say "The X-Files Wiki" instead of just "The X-Files"?
Categories should be sorted in alphabetical order

Overall; good job. Once the above concerns are addressed, I'll pass the article based on the good article criteria. Cheers, TBr and ley 18:24, 2 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

OK, I believe I've fixed all the issues you brought up. Thanks for reviewing this.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:33, 2 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

No problem, I'll pass the article now. TBr and ley 20:02, 2 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

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