Talk:The Father, the Son, and the Holy Fonz/GA1
GA Review
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Nice work. Only a few minor things to be fixed/changed:
- Maybe add a sentence or two to the lead covering the production, to make it a more wholistic summary of the article.
- Spelling in the plot varies between "baptize" and "baptise" - should probably go with the former as it's a US show.
- First plot paragraph needs a full-stop/period at the end.
- "the Griffins dining table" - Griffins'.
- "After Francis puts up the Christian cross in the Griffins dining table, Stewie talking about how Jesus, who is depicted on the cross dying, is not something that would make you want to eat your food, was censored from the television version of the episode" - whole sentence is pretty hard to read given all the commas. Maybe split into two.
- "A scene was animated shown the congregation of Peter's church" - showing"?
- "it was never used due to the series producers being unable" - it was never used as the series producers were unable... (reads better).
- Italicise Sesame Street second time around.
- "December 12-18 2005" should use an endash ( – ).
- Link Nielsen rating, TV Squad.
- "[I] was cracking up from beginning to end on this one." - what's with the square brackets? He actually did say "I" in his review.
- "labeled "The Father, the Son, and the Holy Fonz" the worst show of the week,"" - seems to be an extra quotation mark at the end here.
Otherwise, everything's fine. The GAN will be on hold for a week for you to make changes, so good luck. :) —97198 (talk) 10:48, 24 October 2008 (UTC)
- Okay, I believe that's everything. Cheers for the (as always) thorough review. Note that a number of the issues above were kindly corrected by Mattisse earlier today. Qst (talk) 22:46, 24 October 2008 (UTC)
- All looks good except the last point (The Parents Television Council, a frequent critic of the show, labeled "The Father, the Son, and the Holy Fonz" the worst show of the week".[9]). The quotation mark at the end isn't closing a quote, or opening one. It's not getting in the way of a GA, though, so I'll go ahead and pass it and let you do what you want with that one! —97198 (talk) 06:35, 25 October 2008 (UTC)
- Cheers. I think what you mean it is that I have placed the name of the episode in quotation marks — this is standard practice as far as I know. Otherwise, I've given it a small copyedit, and hopefully its okay. :) Qst (talk) 13:04, 25 October 2008 (UTC)
- Nah, there was a stray quotation mark at the end of the sentence that wasn't really doing anything as far as I could tell... Problem solved, hopefully? Oh wells. :) —97198 (talk) 14:27, 25 October 2008 (UTC)
- Cheers. I think what you mean it is that I have placed the name of the episode in quotation marks — this is standard practice as far as I know. Otherwise, I've given it a small copyedit, and hopefully its okay. :) Qst (talk) 13:04, 25 October 2008 (UTC)
- All looks good except the last point (The Parents Television Council, a frequent critic of the show, labeled "The Father, the Son, and the Holy Fonz" the worst show of the week".[9]). The quotation mark at the end isn't closing a quote, or opening one. It's not getting in the way of a GA, though, so I'll go ahead and pass it and let you do what you want with that one! —97198 (talk) 06:35, 25 October 2008 (UTC)