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Reviewer: DAP388 (talk · contribs) 05:07, 13 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Let's start the review, shall we? :)

Lead
  • "This episode also features a guest appearance by talk show host David Letterman as himself. He appears in the opening sequence at the beginning of the episode." This should be combined to enhance the flow of the lead. This particular line is a bit jagged.
Plot
  • No issues.
Production
  • "The Simpsons creator Matt Groening is a fan of the band and was the one who approached its members with the offer." I'm not particularly fond of the phrasing here. Perhaps this is better, "The Simpsons creator Matt Groening, a fan of the band, was responsible for recruiting its members to the show."
Release
  • No issues.

That's all. Great work! —DAP388 (talk) 19:15, 15 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]