Talk:The Calusari/GA1

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Reviewer: TBrandley (talk · contribs) 16:44, 30 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox

To match with other articles, link "2" in the infobox for season, then remove the episode lists at the very bottom of the infobox
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:13, 30 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Lede

"(stylized as "The Căluşari") is not mentioned/or expanded upon in the article ("Production"). Nor referenced
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:13, 30 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Make a note that it was US airing by saying it is an "American science fiction" or, after Fox network say United States "Fox network in the United States."
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:13, 30 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Only link Fox, not network
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:13, 30 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Episode can't really "premiered" how about "originally aired"
Done (although, premiered is a verb...).--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:13, 30 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Link science fiction to science fiction on television. I think.
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:13, 30 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"It premiered on the Fox network on April 14, 1995. It was written by Sara B. Charno and directed by Michael Vejar. The episode is a "Monster-of-the-Week" story, unconnected to the series' wider mythology, or fictional history." wack of run-on perhaps re-word to: , which originally aired on the Fox network on April 14, 1995. Written by Sara B. Charno, the episode is a "Monster-of-the-Week" story, unconnected to the series' wider mythology, or fictional history. Directed by Michael Vejar, [etc.].
I fail to see how my original sentence is a run-on (a run-on means one long, poorly written sentence). Since mine is several, and you're suggesting a cosmetic re-write, I don't feel that it is necessary.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:13, 30 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Link Nielsen household rating
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:13, 30 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"The Calusari" received mixed reviews from television critics, with inconsistencies in the plot being cited as the main detractors." Re-write to: "The Calusari" received mixed reviews, with critics citing inconsistencies in the plot as the main detractors."
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:13, 30 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Plot

Mulder’s is curly aposthrate. It should be regular ('), as per MOS:PUNCT.
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:13, 30 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"As police" → "As the police"
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:13, 30 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]
grandmother’s is curly aposthrate. It should be regular ('), as per MOS:PUNCT.
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:13, 30 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Production

Add comma after Charno
Commas should be used, in this case, two separate two sentences. Since these aren't two complete sentences, this shouldn't be there.

Broadcast and reception

Episode can "premiered" how about "originally aired"
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:13, 30 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Only Fox should be linked
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:13, 30 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"The Calusari" received mixed reviews from television critics, with inconsistencies in the plot being cited as the main detractors." Re-write to: "The Calusari" received mixed reviews, with critics citing inconsistencies in the plot as the main detractors."
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:13, 30 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]

References

Ref. 2: Link to "Fox Broadcasting Company", not "corporation"
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:13, 30 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Ref. 6: "The X Files - The Calusari rated 18 by the BBFC" after The X-Files should be an en-dash, rather than a regular –, it should be – per WP:DASH
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:13, 30 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Ref. 7 is not needed. It is just a search for Ref. 6
It's actually to show that its the highest-rated of the series. Ref 6 does not show this data.
Ref. 8: Doubled periods with Time, Inc., which should be Time, Inc
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:13, 30 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]

External links

"The X-Files Wiki, an external wiki". Repetitive. How about: "The X-Files, an external wiki"
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:13, 30 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Great work! TBran dl ey 17:07, 30 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]

All have been addressed or my reasoning put down. Thank you!--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:13, 30 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]

No problem. I'll pass. Congrats! TBran dl ey 19:21, 30 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]