Talk:The C Word (30 Rock)/GA1
GA Review
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Reviewer: Gary King (talk) 02:48, 24 April 2010 (UTC)
- The first paragraph of "Production" could be more concise. The first two sentences says who the writer and director are, and the following two sentences mentions how many times they did this in the series so far. These could be merged, to something like "'The C Word' was written by series' creator, executive producer and lead actress Tina Fey, making it her seventh writing credit after the pilot episode, [...]."
- Done. -- ThinkBlue (Hit BLUE) 22:35, 24 April 2010 (UTC)
- Also, "series' creator [Tina Fey]" (in the above, and maybe other places) should instead by "series creator" if you're using the phrase to describe someone.
- Done.
- "15, 2007 as the" – commas after dates, if using MDY
- Added comma.
- "and overall of the series." – probably doesn't need to be said? Redundant to "X episode of the first season"
- Removed.
Gary King (talk) 02:48, 24 April 2010 (UTC)
Passing after some cleanup. Gary King (talk) 03:15, 25 April 2010 (UTC)
- Thank you for the review. -- ThinkBlue (Hit BLUE) 22:10, 25 April 2010 (UTC)