Talk:The Boys (Girls' Generation song)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Carbrera (talk · contribs) 03:05, 2 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Hello, I am Carbrera, and I'll be reviewing this article for possible good article submission.

Full review coming very soon. Carbrera (talk) 03:05, 2 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox

The single cover image requires an alt

Done

Lead

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"hip hop that lyrically talks about female attractiveness." → "hip hop that lyrically discusses female attractiveness."

Done

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Add "an" before "American audience," please

Changed to "audiences" instead

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The last sentence (to me of course) makes it sound like the peak position on the Japan Hot 100 was brought on due to it being released in the United States, which socially doesn't make any sense. Could you reword this?

Done

Background and composition

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You mention who wrote the "Korean" version of the song, but if what you said is true, then who wrote the mentioned English and Japanese versions of the track? Please clarify this to prevent confusion

Done

Is the link to "remixes" necessary?

Done

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The first sentence also seems unnecessary to me; the sentence structure would flow just as well without the inclusion of this statement
Insert a comma after "Universal Music Group" please
You technically include who wrote part of the American version here, but it should most definitely be mentioned earlier to prevent confusion

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Is the inclusion of five lines of lyrics at the end of this section needed?

Hmm I think yes, just to give readers a slight insight on the song's lyrical content.

Promotion

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Reword the lead sentence to this please: "In late 2011, Girls' Generation appeared on several South Korean music programs including Music Bank,[15] Show! Music Core, Inkigayo,[16] and M Countdown[17] to perform and promote "The Boys"." What do you think of that rewording?
Add "a" before "SM Town concert" please

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Change "US television" to "American television" for better flow please
The mention of "in the United States" is now unnecessary

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Insert a comma after the date, "October 19, 2011" please

Reception

Domestic reception

The title of this particular section sounds odd; shouldn't it be something like "Commercial performance" and make it an actual section title?
Otherwise, I have no suggestions for this section

International reception

And shouldn't this section title be better fitted as "Critical reception" or "Critical response"?
Hmm, "the album with the same name" sounds a bit odd currently; couldn't you just say The Boys instead?
There's no reference for the Us Weekly quote in the third paragraph of this section; please add one

The sayings of the two critics are both from The Guardian source

You left an extra space after the quotation mark after "music scene, saying that "..."

Charts

Please use the appropriate chart templates when listing peak positions

Since there are no appropriate entry of the charts at {{singlechart}} the current format is acceptable

Also, please make sure that the peak positions are alphabetized when you list them
The "Sales" column is not necessary when listing the Year-end charts
Please swap the placements of "English version" and "Year-end charts"

End of GA Review:

A very good article with some minor attention needed. I will place the article on hold for seven days to allow for changes; thanks and good luck! Carbrera (talk) 00:25, 26 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@Carbrera: Apart from where noted above, everything else is addressed. Thanks for your review! Simon (talk) 08:45, 26 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

I have read over everything; I will be passing the article. Great work! Carbrera (talk) 22:37, 26 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]