Talk:The Boat Race 1987/GA1

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Reviewer: Miyagawa (talk · contribs) 17:10, 16 October 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Just grabbing this one for a review shortly. Miyagawa (talk) 17:10, 16 October 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Ok here we go:

"The race was sponsored by Beefeater Gin for the first time." - seeing as you've mentioned various years in this paragraph, it would be worthwhile changing this to state "In 1987, the race was sponsored by Beefeater Gin for the first time."
I have rephrased a little. The Rambling Man (talk) 21:06, 16 October 2014 (UTC)[reply]
Unusually I'm going to suggest a trim - I don't think you need to mention the 2015 plans for the women's race as it doesn't mean anything to this article. But it'd be totally worthwhile including on the general Boat Race article or the 2015 specific article.
Until the main article is of a reasonable standard, I don't see a major problem keeping this in place. The Rambling Man (talk) 21:06, 16 October 2014 (UTC)[reply]
When you mention Macdonald in the Mutiny section, you haven't mentioned him previous except for in the lead. So it's worthwhile explaining who he is and including his first name in the first mention within the article body itself.
I've added his name and that he had already rowed for Oxford. The Rambling Man (talk) 21:06, 16 October 2014 (UTC)[reply]

I think that's about it. Once those are sorted out, I'll be happy to pass this article. Miyagawa (talk) 20:58, 16 October 2014 (UTC)[reply]