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Reviewer: Ritchie333 (talk · contribs) 17:33, 20 January 2015 (UTC)
There are still boat race articles to review? Oh, go on then....
Lead
[edit]- Is it worth saying it was Oxford's second win in a row, the only such time since the First World War, and that Princess Margaret attended? And maybe a brief summary of the race, such as the Grauniad's "most gallant finishing efforts"
- Have updated the lead a little. The Rambling Man (talk) 17:57, 20 January 2015 (UTC)
Background
[edit]- "and broadcast worldwide" - was this the case in 1960? I seem to recall transatlantic / worldwide broadcasts only really got underway in the late 60s (example)
- Updated a bit... The Rambling Man (talk) 17:57, 20 January 2015 (UTC)
- "the first member of the British Royal Family to attend the Boat Race in forty years." (on image caption) - I couldn't find the claim for this, but noticed it was down the bottom. Anyway, I've added a Guardian citation to the caption which I assume is correct
- Thanks, my bad. The Rambling Man (talk) 17:57, 20 January 2015 (UTC)
Crews
[edit]- "The Cambridge crew, Beresford suggested, were" - suggest "Beresford suggested the Cambridge Crew were"
- Rephrased. The Rambling Man (talk) 17:57, 20 January 2015 (UTC)
- "Only one participant in this year's race was registered as non-British" - Have I got the wrong source here? This mentions three Harvard graduates
- Yep, that's for the 1961 race. The Rambling Man (talk) 17:57, 20 January 2015 (UTC)
- So, at the risk of being thick, what's a citation for the 1961 race doing in the 1960 race article? Ritchie333 (talk) (cont) 18:07, 20 January 2015 (UTC)
- To cite " the former Harvard University captain"... The Rambling Man (talk) 18:10, 20 January 2015 (UTC)
- So, at the risk of being thick, what's a citation for the 1961 race doing in the 1960 race article? Ritchie333 (talk) (cont) 18:07, 20 January 2015 (UTC)
- Yep, that's for the 1961 race. The Rambling Man (talk) 17:57, 20 January 2015 (UTC)
Race
[edit]- What's "a canvas-length lead"?
- The length of a canvas? Linked to the glossary. The Rambling Man (talk) 17:57, 20 January 2015 (UTC)
- "Oxford spurted at Harrods Furniture Depository" - I don't know if "spurted" is the right word but I thought of somebody spitting on Harrods - maybe "gained advantage" or "improved speed" - hmmm, not sure really
- Spurting or pushing are common descriptions of making a big effort to row harder. It's succinct. Your suggestions aren't really covering it. The Rambling Man (talk) 17:57, 20 January 2015 (UTC)
- Possibly it's because I've been listening to a documentary on Radio 4 about Page 3 in the background and "spurting" brought something else to mind. Anyway, I can't think of anything better, so "spurting it is" Ritchie333 (talk) (cont) 18:05, 20 January 2015 (UTC)
- I agree. When I was doing it, we called it "making a push" or "pushing away from" something tangible, like a bridge or a landmark... The Rambling Man (talk) 18:07, 20 January 2015 (UTC)
- Possibly it's because I've been listening to a documentary on Radio 4 about Page 3 in the background and "spurting" brought something else to mind. Anyway, I can't think of anything better, so "spurting it is" Ritchie333 (talk) (cont) 18:05, 20 January 2015 (UTC)
- Spurting or pushing are common descriptions of making a big effort to row harder. It's succinct. Your suggestions aren't really covering it. The Rambling Man (talk) 17:57, 20 January 2015 (UTC)
- "As the Oxford cox P. J. Reynolds" - needs a comma after "cox" I think
- I disagree, but if you're adamant, feel free to add it in yourself....! The Rambling Man (talk) 17:57, 20 January 2015 (UTC)
Summary
[edit]- That's it - on hold
- As ever, thanks for your review, much appreciated. The Rambling Man (talk) 17:57, 20 January 2015 (UTC)
- No problem. Passed. Ritchie333 (talk) (cont) 18:13, 20 January 2015 (UTC)
- As ever, thanks for your review, much appreciated. The Rambling Man (talk) 17:57, 20 January 2015 (UTC)