Talk:The Boat Race 1859/GA1
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Reviewer: NickGibson3900 (talk · contribs) 07:31, 31 August 2014 (UTC)
Nominator: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs)
- I'll take this NickGibson3900 Talk Sign my Guestbook Contributions 05:45, 31 August 2014 (UTC)
- "For this year's race, Oxford instigated a new method of crew selection: trial eights." - It kinda implies that for the 2014 race. It could be something like, "In 1859, Oxford..."
- "...the selection of crew would be made on" - Should be, "...was made on..." - Why is this part in present text? It should be in past text.
- "Although Cambridge were pre-race favourites, they lost the toss and were handed the Surrey station for the start." - Implies that being favourites usually means you win the toss.
- "Conditions worsened: some of the steamboats in the flotilla following the crews looked bound to capsize." - Maybe: "Conditions soon (Your choice if you want to use the word soon) worsened and some of the..."
- "Oxford took the opportunity to extend their lead and pull away from their opponents and the boats following." - IMHO to make it flow better put "...to extend their lead and they pulled away from their..."
- The short lead is bugging me is there a chance or expansion.
- Thanks for the review, all comments addressed to one degree or another. The Rambling Man (talk) 07:21, 31 August 2014 (UTC)
- @The Rambling Man: Looks good. I'll pass this article. NickGibson3900 Talk Sign my Guestbook Contributions 07:26, 31 August 2014 (UTC)
- Thanks for the review, all comments addressed to one degree or another. The Rambling Man (talk) 07:21, 31 August 2014 (UTC)