Talk:The Best Exotic Marigold Hotel/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Rosiestep (talk · contribs) 03:20, 13 February 2014 (UTC)

I'll review the article within the week. --Rosiestep (talk) 03:20, 13 February 2014 (UTC)

General comments

• overlinking - please tidy

 Done

• fname+lname repetition of almost every name - please tidy (i.e. Judi Dench vs. Dench; John Madden vs. Madden; etc. etc.).

 Done

• Is there any info on Soundtrack and/or track listings?

There seems to be a dearth. QatarStarsLeague (talk) 03:59, 15 February 2014 (UTC)

• Is there any info on its promotion and/or marketing?

Again, there seems to be a general dearth. QatarStarsLeague (talk) 03:59, 15 February 2014 (UTC)

Infobox

• Imagenation Abu Dhabi FZ and Chris Gill - both are mentioned in the infobox but not in the article

Addressed. QatarStarsLeague (talk) 03:59, 15 February 2014 (UTC)

Lead

• "and the highest-grossing specialty releases of the year" - This should either be changed to "and one the highest-grossing specialty releases of the year" or "and the highest-grossing specialty release of the year".

Addressed. QatarStarsLeague (talk) 03:59, 15 February 2014 (UTC)

Plot

• "it's time" - "it is time"

 Done QatarStarsLeague (talk) 05:14, 17 February 2014 (UTC)

Cast

• This section, which includes 'Cast' and 'Characters', seems too short.

It conforms to the ostensible parameters of sections before it. QatarStarsLeague (talk) 05:14, 17 February 2014 (UTC)

• "She narrates throughout, to Day 51 moral at end "We get up in the morning, we do our best". - clunky prose

 Done. QatarStarsLeague (talk) 05:14, 17 February 2014 (UTC)

• "stays inside always" - always stays indoors

 Done. QatarStarsLeague (talk) 05:14, 17 February 2014 (UTC)

• "head for figures" - clunky

 Done. QatarStarsLeague (talk) 05:14, 17 February 2014 (UTC)

• "Although bitterly racist, she chooses not to wait six months for a hip replacement, rather be "outsourced" to India." - clunky

 Done. QatarStarsLeague (talk) 05:14, 17 February 2014 (UTC)

• "Via a translator, Muriel reveals that her bitterness was caused when the family who employed her for most of her life tossed her aside as useless after she devoted her life, love, and trained a young replacement." - clunky

 Done.QatarStarsLeague (talk) 05:14, 17 February 2014 (UTC)

Production

• This section is overly reliant on quotes and needs a bit of a rewrite

I composed the near entirety of this section, and so I am unaware of how I could modify. Any suggestions?

• The content about Cast should be moved into the Cast section.

I feel a potential response will be pursuant to your response to the above inquiry. QatarStarsLeague (talk) 05:14, 17 February 2014 (UTC)

• "Despite the foundation for production having been laid, the film was beset by ignition travails early on, with several film studios, such as Working Title Films, decided to pass on Parker's pitch, considering it unmarketable." - clunky prose

Too many commas, eh?

• Shakespeare in Love, Mrs. Brown, and Slumdog Millionaire - add italics

 Done. QatarStarsLeague (talk) 05:14, 17 February 2014 (UTC)

• Mrs. Kapoor is a... - add quote marks

 Done. QatarStarsLeague (talk) 05:14, 17 February 2014 (UTC)

Box office

• "passed both The Queen (2006) and Calendar Girls (2003)... - why are these two films mentioned vs. others?

I feel it is because they are fairly agnate; both, like TBEMH, are plaintive, British dramas produced with some degree of independence from studios. QatarStarsLeague (talk) 05:14, 17 February 2014 (UTC)

• "It ranks among the best international grossing film released... - It ranks among the highest-grossing international films released...

 Done. QatarStarsLeague (talk) 05:14, 17 February 2014 (UTC)

• "highest grossing - highest-grossing

 Done. QatarStarsLeague (talk) 01:02, 18 February 2014 (UTC)

• "Elsewhere on the globe... - clunky

 Done. QatarStarsLeague (talk) 01:02, 18 February 2014 (UTC)

• Best Exotic Marigold Hotel - add punct

 Done. QatarStarsLeague (talk) 01:02, 18 February 2014 (UTC)

• "Major contributing territories... - I don't think territories is the right word here as the list is about countries.

 Done. QatarStarsLeague (talk) 01:02, 18 February 2014 (UTC)

• "prolific resumes of the cast he noted "othing in this insipid story - othing?/nothing?

 Done. QatarStarsLeague (talk) 01:02, 18 February 2014 (UTC)

• "He went on to opine that the film appeared oddly like an Agatha Christie thriller with all the pasteboard characters, 2D backstories and foreign locale, but no murder." - missing quote marks

 Done. QatarStarsLeague (talk) 01:02, 18 February 2014 (UTC)

Sequel

• Doesn't need subheaders

 Done. QatarStarsLeague (talk) 01:02, 18 February 2014 (UTC)

• Prose:
  • "told in the news - clunky

 Done. QatarStarsLeague (talk) 01:02, 18 February 2014 (UTC)

• • "may join the ensamble cast of the film - may join the ensemble cast of the film (trim and fix typo)

 Done. QatarStarsLeague (talk) 01:02, 18 February 2014 (UTC)

• • "is in talks to join the ensemble cast of the sequel film - is in talks to join the ensemble cast of the sequel film

 Done. QatarStarsLeague (talk) 01:02, 18 February 2014 (UTC)

• • "other newcomers also added to the film include Tamsin Greig and David Strathairn - other newcomers also added to the film include Tamsin Greig and David Strathairn

 Done. QatarStarsLeague (talk) 01:02, 18 February 2014 (UTC)

• • "Later on January 10 - Later on January 10

 Done. QatarStarsLeague (talk) 01:02, 18 February 2014 (UTC)

References

• refs 4, 5, 16, 25, 30, 31 - bare URLs

 Done. QatarStarsLeague (talk) 16:31, 18 February 2014 (UTC)

• ref 2 - Bates - add publisher

 Done. QatarStarsLeague (talk) 16:31, 18 February 2014 (UTC)

• ref 8 - Fodors - deadlink

 Done. QatarStarsLeague (talk) 16:31, 18 February 2014 (UTC)

• ref 9 - It's pointing to 2013 productions, rather than the one for 30 November 2011

I don't see it indicating any production dates, just personnel. QatarStarsLeague (talk) 16:31, 18 February 2014 (UTC)

• ref 13 - CommingSoon.net - typo

 Done. QatarStarsLeague (talk) 16:31, 18 February 2014 (UTC)

• ref 20 - Chicago Sun Times?

No, the SF Chronicle.  Done. QatarStarsLeague (talk) 16:31, 18 February 2014 (UTC)

External links

• I don't think the sequel should be included as it's still in production

See Alice in Wonderland (2010 film), The Wolverine (film), and Prometheus (2012 film) for GA film sequel sections. QatarStarsLeague (talk) 16:31, 18 February 2014 (UTC)

Images

• Marquee in Lewisburg, Pennsylvania - I'm not sure why this img is included other than it has the name of the movie

That seems to be the only reason. I inherited this image. QatarStarsLeague (talk) 16:31, 18 February 2014 (UTC)

Review done. I'll put it on hold for the usual 7 days. --Rosiestep (talk) 15:45, 14 February 2014 (UTC)

I've given it an overhaul and introduced some new text and polished it up and added to the lead. I believed I've addressed most of the concerns. Should be OK for GA now providing that Qatar has addressed your other points Rosie.♦ Dr. Blofeld 20:25, 18 February 2014 (UTC)

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

1. Is it reasonably well written?

   A. Prose quality:

   B. MoS compliance:

2. Is it factually accurate and verifiable?

   A. References to sources:

   B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:

   C. No original research:

3. Is it broad in its coverage?

   A. Major aspects:

   B. Focused:

4. Is it neutral?

   Fair representation without bias:

5. Is it stable?

   No edit wars, etc:

6. Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?

   A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:

   B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:

7. Overall:

   Pass or Fail:

Good job -- both of you. Looks adequate for GA. --Rosiestep (talk) 02:30, 19 February 2014 (UTC)