Talk:Terry Conroy/GA1

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Reviewer: Sainsf (talk · contribs) 13:18, 9 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Hi! I will be reviewing this in the next few days. Sainsf (talk · contribs) 13:18, 9 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Fairly well-written, only a few comments: Sainsf (talk · contribs) 14:41, 9 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

in a 14-year career in the Football League It may be helpful to give the years he was active in a (x–y) form here. Something similar may look good near a seven-year international career.
- OK, done.--Echetus Xe 20:47, 9 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]
You can add "Irish club" before "Glentoran" as you have done for Waterford.
- I'd say it's not needed as it goes on to say he won the Irish Cup and Irish League with Glentoran, but its up to you.--Echetus Xe 20:47, 9 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]
distinctive appearance of pale skin and bright ginger hair and sideburns Maybe shorten this to "distinctive pale skin, bright ginger hair and sideburns"? (Also in "Style of play")
- Ah good thinking.--Echetus Xe 20:47, 9 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Does "insurance" need a link? (Also in "Personal life")
- Done.--Echetus Xe 20:47, 9 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

When you begin with the main article, you should write the full name of the person
- Done.--Echetus Xe 20:47, 9 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]
two jobs as a factory worker "...two jobs: as a factory worker..."
- Done.--Echetus Xe 20:47, 9 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Does "housekeeping" need a link?
- Done.--Echetus Xe 20:47, 9 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]
he was too small Too "young" if it refers to age, or "short" if it refers to height?
- I'd say bulk would also be included, but probably mainly height.--Echetus Xe 20:47, 9 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

A few images would give this a more interesting look.
- Done.--Echetus Xe 20:47, 9 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]
"Friendly" may be appropriately wikilinked.
- Done.--Echetus Xe 20:47, 9 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]
more cartilage in his knees "from" and not "in", I think
- Probably yeah.--Echetus Xe 20:47, 9 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]
"John Mahoney" is a duplink
- Done.--Echetus Xe 20:47, 9 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Both of these games...France finished third. Source?
- Done.--Echetus Xe 20:47, 9 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Duplinks: Shamrock Rovers and XI, Lansdowne Road
- Done.--Echetus Xe 20:47, 9 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Italics for "Daily Express".
- Done.--Echetus Xe 20:47, 9 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]
"Victoria Ground" is a duplink, but linking it may be relevant here
- Done.--Echetus Xe 20:47, 9 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Begin section with "Conroy".
- Done.--Echetus Xe 20:47, 9 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

No copyvio detected. Will check sources later. Sainsf (talk · contribs) 15:26, 9 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

OK, thank you for the comments. I have found them useful.--Echetus Xe 20:47, 9 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Alright, done with the above issues. Moving on to sources: Sainsf (talk · contribs) 11:19, 10 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Assuming good faith for offline inaccessible sources.
Page ranges for refs 1 and 11?
- I've asked the guy with those books to add them.--Echetus Xe 17:52, 10 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]
I expect each point in the infobox is sourced, there or somewhere else in the article?
- Yeah: birthplace and date, height, position, stats.--Echetus Xe 17:52, 10 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]
A note on the top of the section "International" saying ref 7 supports everything in it would be helpful, as in the preceding section.
- Done.--Echetus Xe 17:52, 10 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]
It is better to name the publisher properly whenever you can, instead of using the website name. For example, you can say Rec.Sport.Soccer Statistics Foundation instead of rsssf.com (ref 59)
- Done.--Echetus Xe 17:52, 10 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]