Talk:Terri Runnels/GA1

GA Review

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I'll be happy to review this article for GAC. H1nkles (talk) 15:45, 13 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]

GA Review Philosophy

When I do an article review I like to provide a Heading-by-Heading breakdown of suggestions for how to make the article better. It is done in good faith as a means to improve the article. It does not necessarily mean that the article is not GA quality, or that the issues listed are keeping it from GA approval. I also undertake minor grammatical and prose edits. After I finish this part of the review I will look at the over arching quality of the article in light of the GA criteria and make my determination as to the overall quality of the article.

GA Checklist

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

Is it well written?
A. The prose is clear and concise, and the spelling and grammar are correct:

B. It complies with the manual of style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation:
Is it verifiable with no original research, as shown by a source spot-check?
A. It contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline:

B. Reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose):

C. It contains no original research:

D. It contains no copyright violations nor plagiarism:
Is it broad in its coverage?
A. It addresses the main aspects of the topic:

B. It stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style):
Is it neutral?
It represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each:
Is it stable?
It does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute:
Is it illustrated, if possible, by images?
A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content:
A photo would be good at some point.

B. Images are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
Overall:
Pass or Fail:
Article is good and I'll pass it with pleasure.

Regarding Lead

"In the early years of her career with the WWF, she managed her real-life husband Dustin Runnels (known on-screen as Goldust), was a member of the Pretty Mean Sisters alliance, and managed both The Hardy Boyz and Edge and Christian following the Terri Invitational Tournament in 1999". Fairly long sentence, you may want to consider breaking it up.
Otherwise the lead looks good. H1nkles (talk) 15:50, 13 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Divided in two. Nikki♥311 22:16, 13 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Regarding World Championship Wrestling

No problems here looks good.

Regarding WWF

Managing Goldust/P.M.S.

This sentence is awkward, "She later joined forces with Jacqueline Moore to form the Pretty Mean Sisters (P.M.S.), who had just ended her alliance with Marc Mero." Consider rewording or breaking into two sentences.

I switched the words around a bit. Nikki♥311 22:16, 13 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Terri Invitational Tournament

I don't think you need to wikilink U.S. Dollar sign. It doesn't really add to the article.

Un-linked. Nikki♥311 22:16, 13 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]

In this sentence, "They later participated in a "Stink Face match" at SummerSlam, which The Kat won by first performing the move on Runnels.[19][20]" you wiki link "the move" to link to "Stink Face" but you don't link it to the first mention of "stink face" earlier in the sentence. Is there a reason for that? It just seems a bit awkward. H1nkles (talk) 16:02, 13 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Agreed. Switched to first instance. Nikki♥311 22:16, 13 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]

The Radicalz

"She accompanied Saturn to the ring at Fully Loaded in July...." July when? 2001? You say 2001 later in the paragraph, you may want to include it here just for clarity.

It was actually July 2000, so apparently clarification was needed. :) Nikki♥311 22:16, 13 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Regarding Personal Life

Everything is fine except a one-sentence stub paragraph at the end of the section.

I added a sentence more about the appearance. Nikki♥311 22:16, 13 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]

In wrestling and Championships and accomplishments

Both are good.

Regarding footnotes

Per WP:CITE you want to italicize titles of journals, magazines, book titles etc. So I'm not sure about SLAM! Wrestling, if that is just a website or if it is also a magazine, "Wrestling Digest" is another one.

Done. SLAM! is just a website, so I didn't italicize it. Nikki♥311 22:16, 13 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Your article is very well-referenced. H1nkles (talk) 16:16, 13 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Two "Miami Herold" links, footnotes 1 and 27 are dead, they will need to fixed. H1nkles (talk) 16:20, 13 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Unfortunately, the Miami Herald has a bad habit of archiving their stories, so that you can't access them again, even by archive.org. I found a copy of the first one, so I added it to the reference. I couldn't find a copy of the second one, but since the information was already sourced by other sources, too...I just removed it. Nikki♥311 22:16, 13 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Overall comments

The article is in good shape, really the only hang up are the issues here in the footnotes section. Fix those and I'll pass it with ease.
Any photo available? It's nice to have one in a GA. Otherwise well done! I'll put it on hold and look forward to your comments. H1nkles (talk) 16:20, 13 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]

I believe I have addressed all of your comments. Thanks for taking the time to review the article. Nikki♥311 22:16, 13 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Great I'll take a final look. Thanks for the quick fixes. H1nkles (talk) 22:39, 13 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Everything is in order, I'll pass it with my compliments. H1nkles (talk) 22:49, 13 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks so much. :) Nikki♥311 00:37, 14 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]