Talk:Teraupo'o/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Hog Farm (talk · contribs) 23:30, 6 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Criteria

1. Prose ✓ Pass

2. Verifiability ✓ Pass

3. Depth of Coverage ✓ Pass

4. Neutral ✓ Pass

5. Stable ✓ Pass

6. Illustrations ✓ Pass

7. Miscellaneous ✓ Pass

Comments

1.

"decade long" - Should this be hypenated?

Changed.

Any way we could get a few more sentences in the lead to beef it up? The lead could do a bit better job summarizing the entire article in this case. For instance, that he was a "chief of a minor lineage" could be added to the lead.
"He was born on c. 1855" - I don't think on is the best word here. You're born on a date, but since the date is unknown, it's just the year. Normally, you're born in or during a year.

Changed.

"in the Leeward Islands (Society Islands)" - This gives the implication that the Leeward Islands is an alternate name for the Society Islands when it's really just a part of the Societies. It would be better to use a piped link and then state that the Leewards are part of the Societies.

Changed. That was a odd one.

"tāvana" - Most of the other non-English words are italicized, but this one isn't. Is there a reason why?

Changed.

"1847 Convention" - Is this an alternate name for the Convention of 1847? If not, I don't think convention should be capitalized here.

Yes it is.

Wikilink Huahine.

Done.

" the order of King Tamatoa VI to surrender to the French and build up a resistance force in 1887" - As it stands, this indicates that Tamatoa VI order to surrender to the French and also build up a resistance force. This seems a little contradictory and makes me wonder if it should be built instead of build. This would change the meaning to indicate that Tamatoa order the surrender, but Teraupo'o built a resistance force instead. Which is correct?

Changed.

" faterehau of Opoa" - The meaning of faterehau needs stated.

It is a name not a title.

Teraupiste is sometimes capitalized and sometimes not. This should be consistent.

Changed.

"supplied him arms and fund" - "supplied him with arms and funds" is a possibility for a smoother reading. Regardless, funds should probably be in the plural.

Changed.

"Resident Frederick Moss" - Is there a reason Resident is capitalized? Is this a title?

It is a title.

"the 1878 Kanak in New Caledonia" - Calling out a specific year in this case makes it sound like an event, but Kanak is a people group. Was it a rebellion? If so, you can call it the 1878 Kanak rebellion if that's accurate.

Typo when pipelinking in the past.

"The casualty of the six-week campaign was nearly fifty deaths mainly on the side of the Raiateans." - This isn't really grammatical. Casualty is usually used to refer to the loss of a single person.

Changed.

2.

The Newbury references should be in chronological order of publication

Is that the policy? I've been arranging them alphabetically by titles.

That's work then. I've always seen it in chronological order, but looking through policy the only requirement is that last names are alphabetized.

3.

" in accordance with the Convention of 1847" - Can we get a brief explanation of what the Convention of 1847 guaranteed?

"but the kingdoms of the Leeward Islands including Raiatea-Tahaa were ensured independence by France and Great Britain under the Jarnac Convention or the Anglo-French Convention of 1847" - It is in the article. Does it need more context?

That's fine

The article is in the category Category:Deaths from Spanish flu. If this is accurate, it should be specified in the article. If not, go ahead and take it out of that category, although categorization isn't a GA requirement.

"He died at Vaiaau on 23 December 1918, at the height of the Spanish flu epidemic." It is in the article. There isn't much details beyond that.

Yeah, if we don't know for sure that he died of the flu, it shouldn't be included.

We do though and that’s what is said in article. KAVEBEAR (talk) 14:57, 8 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Oh, okay. I was misinterpreting what the article was said - I thought it was saying that he only died during, the epidemic. Also, if you feel like that's the most that can be done without making the lead WP:UNDUE, that's fine. Hog Farm (talk) 15:04, 8 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

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Would it be appropriate the add a person infobox to this article?

Done.

Placing on hold. Hog Farm (talk) 00:20, 8 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

@Hog Farm: Expanded the lead. KAVEBEAR (talk) 05:37, 10 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Promoting Hog Farm (talk) 15:07, 10 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

@Hog Farm: Thanks. Would want to take a crack at reviewing Tuarii? KAVEBEAR (talk) 05:13, 14 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]