Talk:Tennessee Walking Horse National Celebration/GA1

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Reviewer: Carbrera (talk · contribs) 02:45, 17 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox

For the image, all you have to list is the file name, so remove "File:" and "|thumb|center" please

I can't get it to work without it; the picture doesn't appear. No idea why, although it may be a problem with the infobox (which I made because I needed it for a couple of articles). I'll try a few things and should be able to fix it. Apparently that infobox does have to have the "File" and jpg. 😕

The image of the celebration needs an alt description so please add one

~~Added a caption; working on getting the alt description parameter up at the template~~ OK, I finally figured out how to add an alt description, so that's done

In order to remain stylistically in-sync, please add a space before "sanctioning body 2=" and "location = "

OK, done

Remove the "slogan" parameter since it is currently unused

Done

Lead

", and has been held annually in or near Shelbyville, Tennessee since its inception." --> ", and has been held annually in or near Shelbyville, Tennessee since its inception in 1939."

Fixed

"The Celebration was begun by Henry Davis, a horse trainer who thought the Shelbyville area should have a festival or annual event. He and a group of fellow horsemen founded the Celebration in 1939." --> "The Celebration was conceived by Henry Davis, a horse trainer, along with several horsemen, who felt the Shelbyville area should have a festival or annual event."

Also fixed

Remove "prior to Labor Day" please

Done

"every year," --> "annually,"

Done

History

Paragraph 1

"He thought that Wartrace should have a similar festival, and proposed the idea to a group of fellow horsemen, who accepted it.[1]" --> "He felt that Wartrace should have a similar festival, and proposed the idea to a group of fellow horsemen, who accepted it.[1]"

Changed the wording.

In the lead you say "Shelbyville area", but here you say "Wartrace"?

Wartrace is technically in the Shelbyville area. 😊 It's about 10 miles northeast of Shelbyville. I can't find anything about when exactly they moved it, though.

"as tiny Wartrace..." --> "as small Wartrace..."

Fixed

Paragraph 2

Move Reference #5 to the end of the sentence instead of its current and awkward placement after "11 days and nights" please

Done

Notable winners

All good! :)

Controversies

"criticised..." --> "criticized..."

Changed to US spelling (I think a British editor wrote that sentence)

"Every horse entered in the Celebration must undergo an inspection designed to detect sored horses conducted by an APHIS-employed inspector before it is allowed to show. " --> "Every horse entered in the Celebration must undergo an inspection conducted by an APHIS-employed inspector to detect sored horses before the horse is allowed to show. "

OK, changed wording.

Venue and classes

Paragraph 1

No source for "and is the one used for most classes."; please add one

Found one

Paragraph 2

No source for "The TWHNC features a wide variety of classes in both in-hand and performance, including divisions for youth, amateurs, and professionals."; please add one

@Carbrera: I can't find the source that says precisely that, but this and others list several classes for kids, amateurs (people who don't make money from horses) and professional trainers. Is it OK to use that, or would it be synth? I can just remove the sentence if it's a problem. White Arabian Filly ^Neigh 22:18, 17 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@White Arabian Filly: Yes, it would be okay to use that for the source. Carbrera (talk) 23:32, 17 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

OK, thanks. Fixed!

End of GA Review:

A fairly short article, but also a very well-written article. Good work! I will be placing the article on hold for seven days to allow for changes to be made. Please contact me or @PING me with any questions, comments, or concerns. Thank you and good luck! Cheers, Carbrera (talk) 02:45, 17 June 2016 (UTC).[reply]

OK Carbrera, I think I've fixed everything except "File" in front of the picture. (I think that's how the infobox was made, because I had a lot of trouble with the picture at first, and it won't appear any other way...) Thanks for your review! White Arabian Filly ^Neigh 20:30, 18 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]