Talk:Telethon (Parks and Recreation)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Tbhotch^Talk ^C. 18:18, 25 June 2010 (UTC)[reply]

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

Is it reasonably well written?
A. Prose quality:

B. MoS compliance:
Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
A. References to sources:

B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:

C. No original research:
Is it broad in its coverage?
A. Major aspects:

B. Focused:
Is it neutral?
Fair representation without bias:
Is it stable?
No edit wars, etc:
Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:

B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
Overall:
Pass or Fail:

Lead

who stars as protagonist Leslie Knope, -> Maybe I am wrong, but there is not a missing word (the) between "as" and "protagonist"?

I don't think it was necessary grammatically, but since you tripped over it, I'm sure others would as well. I fixed it. — Hun ter Ka hn 03:55, 1 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Plot

Andy's band Mouse Rat is asked -> Maybe Andy's band, Mouse Rat, is asked

Done. — Hun ter Ka hn 03:55, 1 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

consuming Sweetums -> wikilink

I wasn't sure if a wikilink was appropriate, since it links to an article about the episode "Sweetums", not the fictional product itself. But I added the link. — Hun ter Ka hn 03:55, 1 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Production

Parks and Recreation protagonist Leslie Knope.[1] It was the first episode she had written for Parks and Recreation -> Parks and Recreation twice.

Done. — Hun ter Ka hn 03:55, 1 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

,[5][3][6] and -> ,[3][5][6] and

This is no longer an issue due to the next item... — Hun ter Ka hn 03:55, 1 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I'm not sure about the Twitter reference, first becasue is not reliable and second he said, maybe a joke I don't know, "I might be" and "The Camel episodie". Also it says "...role as sewage department worker Joe..." that the source does not state it. With the other two references is enough.

I removed it. I'm a bit disappointed because I know the fact is true, but I also know I was stretching a bit with the sourcing, so it's gone. I kept the references to Fox in the plot summary and guest appearance list because in those cases, the primary source (i.e. the episode, cast credits) are sufficient. — Hun ter Ka hn 03:55, 1 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Parks and Recreation is used five times in the para.

I removed a few. — Hun ter Ka hn 03:55, 1 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Cultural references

"Leslie starts talking about her favorite episodes of Friends" -> The reference states "My second favorite episode: Monica’s making dinner. And Joey is mad at Chandler" Is her favourite episodie or the second?

I think it might be her second favorite or whatever, but the current wording doesn't say she talked about her "favorite episode", it said she talks about her favorite episodes", meaning her group of favorites and not her one single favorite. I think the current wording is sufficient. — Hun ter Ka hn 03:55, 1 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Ok. Tbhotch^Talk ^C. 04:08, 1 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Reception

received a 2.8 rating/5 share among overall viewers, and a 2.0 rating/7 share among viewers -> I think that this is wrong, maybe "received a 2.8/5 rating share among overall viewers, and a 2.0/7 rating share among viewers.

I'm pretty sure the current wording is correct. If you are sure, I'll change it, but I think it's right as is right now. — Hun ter Ka hn 03:55, 1 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

No, it's OK, it only sounded akward for me. Tbhotch^Talk ^C. 04:08, 1 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I've reviewed it twice and that are some issues. On hold until July 2, 2010 (UTC). Tbhotch^Talk ^C. 18:18, 25 June 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I'm passing the article, it meets the GA criteria, although I didn't see the episodie, your plot made me laugh alot. Well done! Tbhotch^Talk ^C. 04:08, 1 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]