Talk:Teenage Dream: The Complete Confection/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: WonderBoy1998 (talk · contribs) 16:47, 12 November 2013 (UTC) Hi! I'll be conducting the GA review for this article. Hopefully it doesn't take much time. --WonderBoy1998 (talk) 16:47, 12 November 2013 (UTC)

Background

• "it debuted in the peak position" → "it debuted at number one on both the U.S. Bill..."

 Done

• " Initial pressings were packaged with a lenticular cover" - there is no reference for this? --WonderBoy1998 (talk) 17:46, 12 November 2013 (UTC)

 Done, I removed some of the unintentionally unsourced material.

Singles and promo

• I don't see any use of including two sound samples here as they don't seem to convey any vital information. Plus detailed purpose of usage for this article has not been mentioned in their rationales. I think remove Wide Awake and include only Part of Me, and in the sample description, mention something related to its composition.

 Done

• "became the twentieth song in the history of Billboard to debut in the peak position of the U.S. Billboard Hot 100" → "became the twentieth song in the history of the U.S. Billboard charts to debut at number one on the Hot 100"

 Done

• Ref no 28- "Teenage Dream: The Complete Confection Out Now!". KatyPerry.com. March 26, 2012. Retrieved October 26, 2013" - the link is dead. See here

 Done

Critical reception

• The AU Review does not seem to be a reputable source. --WonderBoy1998 (talk) 19:13, 12 November 2013 (UTC)

 Done, removed.

• The Seattle Post-Intelligencer review is actually from Blogcritics. Here is the Original review

 Done, thanks!

Commercial

• As far as I can read Billboard's info about the album's charting ("Katy Perry's deluxe reissue of her "Teenage Dream" album, dubbed "Teenage Dream: The Complete Confection," spurs the set 31-7 with 33,000 (up 190%). It's the album's highest rank since the Feb. 5, 2011 chart and its best sales frame since Christmas") I think the magazine is considering Confection as the deluxe edition of Teenage Dream and thus basically it raised the original higher. If this is right I think the "and consequently re-entered " should be reworded to "which conse...."

 Done

• Similarly "and rose from number 34" → "which rose.."

 Done

• "number 6" → "number six" (WP:ORDINAL)

 Done

• I think for the UK and US charting info, the sentences should be worded in such a sense that Confection helped boost sales of Dream, rather than charted together.

 Done

• I decided to ease some of your work and provided individual citations to Hung Medien sites. --WonderBoy1998 (talk) 19:13, 12 November 2013 (UTC)

Thanks!

Release hist

• Instead of making an entirely different column for the sources, why don't you just add the reference next to the name of the country? --WonderBoy1998 (talk) 19:13, 12 November 2013 (UTC)

I personally prefer putting them in a separate column, I think it looks more organized, but I'll merge the columns if you'd like.

Okay that's fine, let it be --WonderBoy1998 (talk) 01:21, 13 November 2013 (UTC)

Lead

• " Perry collaborated with producers including Dr. Luke and Max Martin to refine leftover materia" - the body mentions that Tricky Stewart helped in refining leftovers?

 Done

• "Having charted together with Teenage Dream" - change this to something like "The release of Confection lead to an increase in sales of Dream, which then reached...."

 Done

• " debuted in the peak position of the U.S." → "debuted at number one on the U.S...."

 Done

• The body does not mention anything related to Part of Me being certified double-platinum. Please include it somewhere. --WonderBoy1998 (talk) 19:13, 12 November 2013 (UTC)

 Done

Passing --WonderBoy1998 (talk) 17:46, 12 November 2013 (UTC)