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Lead
  • "with his tag team partner Cody Rhodes." insert a comma after "partner"
    • Check.
      •  Works for me
  • "He won the Fusion Pro Tag Team Championship with his half brother, Mike, in February 2007, and also toured Japan briefly with Pro Wrestling Noah, before signing a developmental contract with WWE in July 2007." Try to break this down into two sentences.
  • Make a small note that Manu was released. Otherwise we're left wondering what happened to him.
    • The lead shouldn't give any info. away, than in the main body of the text.
    • I agree with 'Blue, it's not necessary in the lead in my opinion. ♥Nici♥Vampire♥Heart♥ 21:58, 18 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]
      • I really do think so. It's confusing to randomly drop Manu's name and not leave even a brief note. Maybe say something like "Ted joined Cody and Randy (without Manu) to form The Legacy." It's just confusing, because it doesn't tell me if Manu is gone, or if he was a hidden member, or what.
  • Write out Mike's full name.
    • Check.
      •  Works for me
Prose
  • Write out Mike's full name again.
    • Done.
      •  Works for me
  • "received professional wrestling training with Chris Youngblood in" - change "with" to "from"
      •  Works for me
    • Done.
  • "DiBiase and Mike" make it "Ted and Mike" (a few occasions)
    • Why? It's standard to use his last name, I don't find it confusing, and this format is used in both Matt Hardy and Jeff Hardy with no objections. ♥Nici♥Vampire♥Heart♥ 21:58, 18 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]
      • Because their both DiBiase's. It just makes sense that if you're using one of their first names, you should use both of their first names. Would it sound better to say "Obama and Michelle" or "Barack and Michelle." The second one, IMO.
        • I still disgaree, so I've reworded it to "the DiBiase brothers" which I believe is an acceptable compromise.
          •  Works for me
  • Why is KENTA notable enough to be included in that sentence? If he's not, remove him. If he is, explain why it's important that Ted wrestled him.
  • Change the {{main|The Legacy}} to {{seealso|The Legacy}}
    • Done.
      •  Works for me
  • "after Rhodes turned on Holly," switch "turned on" to "betrayed"
    • Done.
      •  Works for me
  • link to mentor
  • "so he could film the direct to DVD movie, The Marine 2." - it should be linked to Direct-to-video not DVD
    • Done.
      •  Works for me
  • "at Backlash," -> "at the Backlash pay-per-view"
    • Done.
      •  Works for me
  • There should be a note of the new rivalry with HHH/HBK. Just a small note that they began a direct rivalry with DX and will compete against them at SummerSl
  • "straight-to-DVD project" - be consistent. use either "direct-to-DVD" or "straight-to-DVD in the spots it's mentioned in the article.
In wrestling
  • The "managers" section can be removed. It was mentioned in the article, and is only one person. Therefore, it's redundant to list there.
Images

Hope this helps. Good luck with the review! iMatthew talk at 17:39, 16 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the review. I've gotten half of the concerns, I'll let Nici do the rest, since she's more familiar with the article. --  ThinkBlue  (Hit BLUE) 01:45, 17 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]
I got the rest. ♥Nici♥Vampire♥Heart♥ 21:58, 18 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]
I left a few more comments and the rest looked fine. iMatthew talk at 22:21, 18 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]
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