Talk:Tectoy/GA1

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Reviewer: Indrian (talk · contribs) 22:17, 26 June 2018 (UTC)[reply]

I know I am still finishing one of these up for you, but I will get to this one in the very near future as well. Indrian (talk) 22:17, 26 June 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Awesome, I'll be looking forward to it. Red Phoenix ^talk 23:20, 26 June 2018 (UTC)[reply]

@Indrian: Just wanted to give you a gentle nudge to remind you of this. Red Phoenix ^talk 21:57, 18 July 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Oops! I did let this one get away a bit didn't I. I am so sorry. I will attend to it later this week. Indrian (talk) 22:56, 18 July 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Okay, after letting this sit waaay too long (sorry!) its time to knock this review out.

"Tectoy had a goal from the start to enter the video game market as well as offer electronic toys which its main competitors did not sell." - The part about electronic toys should be reworded. As written, this could either mean that none of its competitors sold electronic toys (the intended interpretation, I think?) or that it was the exclusive marketer of the electronic toys it sold but its competitors also made electronic toys.
"Tectoy would later bring the Master System and Sega Genesis (as the Mega Drive) to the region" - So, naming arguments, blah blah blah. The problem I have with this wording is its inaccurate. I know we call our article Genesis for a variety of reasons, but from a historical accuracy point of view, it was the Mega Drive first. Therefore, in the US, Sega brought the Mega Drive to the region as the Genesis. In Brazil, Tec Toy just brought the Mega Drive to the region.

In 1997, Tectoy saw financial losses of R$35.9 million and saw a 32% drop in revenue compared to its previous year, after failing to meet its revenue goal the year before. - What year they failed to meet a revenue goal is unclear. Is this referring to the 1996 fiscal year, thus modifying the subject of the sentence, or the 1995 fiscal year, modifying the statement about a drop in revenue compared to the previous year. Also, do our sources explain why the company started losing money? There is a little bit in the next paragraph, but its still pretty vague.

In addition to the Zeebo, Sony was selling its consoles - As worded, this sentence is stating that Sony was selling the Zeebo and the PlayStation.

By 1996, Tectoy had sold 2 million video game consoles, and were receiving 50,000 calls a month to their video game tip line." - All the other console sales figures in the article are discussed chronologically in the history section. It feels like this sentence belongs there as well.
"Some examples of this include: Teddy Boy became Geraldinho, certain Wonder Boy titles became Monica's Gang games, and Ghost House became Chapolim vs. Dracula: Um Duelo Assutador" - If I am remembering correctly, some of these games were changed to tie in with popular entertainment properties in Brazil. If so, that deserves a mention.
"Another product, the Teddy Ruxpin, is a teddy bear that moves and tells stories." - The article should note that this was a licensed property, not an original creation.

That seems to be about it. I'll place this On hold while changes are made. Indrian (talk) 16:19, 20 July 2018 (UTC)[reply]

I think I got them all. Funny how you read my mind about naming debate this, naming debate that, blah blah blah... I though the same thing myself trying to frame it right in the article, lol. Red Phoenix ^talk 23:06, 20 July 2018 (UTC)[reply]
- Sorry the endgame took so long, I was out of town last week and some significant copy-editing was still needed. I have now done a little rewriting here and there for grammar and flow, and feel the article is ready for promotion. Well done! Indrian (talk) 14:45, 2 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]