Talk:Techno-globalism
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[edit]Overall this is very good, however, there are a few places that could use some improvement.
First, there are a number of instances of missing words or inconsistent tense. For example, in the "Origins and Background" part, you say "Nuclear arms race and the space race," forgetting "The" at the start of the sentence. Another example can be found in the "Examples of techno-globalism on a national scale" part where you say "each country utilize its strengths" rather than "utilized". In the same sentence, you later state that the "parts are finally assembled in space," but it is not clear from the earlier syntax if this is still happening or all happened in the past.
Second, there are a few points where your bias and opinions shine through. For example, you mention the "elegant aesthetics of the MacBook Pro" but that is an opinion.
Third, this article would greatly benefit from linking other relevant topics. This can be done by adding two square brackets on either side of the text (see the source code of this note for reference).
Finally, the format leaves a lot to be desired. The three images across the page distort the content a bit too much and the article doesn't really match the look of most Wikipedia articles. If you find that you can't seem to fit all the images you would like to, perhaps consider not using a few of them. Some appear a bit redundant and the desired effect could be attained by linking their Wikipedia Pages in the actual text. For example, the LHC could easily be linked rather than showing as an image. You should also consider adding a "References" section at the end to differentiate your references from "The impact of techno-globalism on science."
Some stuff to work on, but your explanations and research seem sound.