Talk:Tatiana Calderón/GA1

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Reviewer: Sportsfan77777 (talk · contribs) 02:59, 25 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

in Colombia and the United States ===>>> in either Colombia or the United States (to clarify that she is not the first to win both, but the first in Colombia, and also the first in the US)
- Done MWright96 (talk) 07:43, 25 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
the test driver <<<=== Just confirming, is she the only test driver on the team?
- Yes she is MWright96 (talk) 08:42, 25 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Is it normal to leave out the driver's height in the infobox?
- Yes, because the infobox racing template does not allow an editor to add the driver's height MWright96 (talk) 08:42, 25 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Is there a specific type of car or race that she does most often? Or has she participated in so many different types of auto races that it's not worth trying to generalize or mention? Based on all of the different racing series she has been in, I wouldn't be surprised if it was the latter.
- No specific type of car MWright96 (talk) 08:42, 25 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Early life

Both of her parents operate a Kia Motors dealership in Bogotá. ===>>> Here parents operate a Kia Motors dealership together in Bogotá.
- Done MWright96 (talk) 07:43, 25 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Karting

She was inspired by ===>>> Calderón was inspired by (Since the previous starts with her mother)
- Done MWright96 (talk) 07:43, 25 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
rammed by her male rivals and she retaliated ===>>> rammed by her male rivals, forcing her to retaliate (The other way doesn't have parallel sentence structure.)
- Done MWright96 (talk) 07:43, 25 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
The success led to Calderón receiving her first few outings racing cars, at the age of 14, <<<=== I couldn't find this in any of the sources. (And is "outings racing cars" correct? I'm not sure what means.)
- Reworded the sentence and removed that detail MWright96 (talk) 07:43, 25 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

2009

one class victory, ten category podium finishes and accrued ===>>> one class victory and ten category podium finishes, accruing (Also, should "class victory" be "race victory"? And is a "category podium" different from a "podium"?)
- Rewriten MWright96 (talk) 07:43, 25 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Calderón entered the final three weekends <<<=== Start a new sentence (unless it's directly related to Soucek?)
- Done MWright96 (talk) 07:43, 25 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
She had tyre issues during her European Series campaign, and Double R Racing's inexperience competing in the championship meant she scored no points in the season. ===>>> Maybe something like "She scored no points during her European Series campaign, in part because..." (I don't feel like either of the first two necessarily imply she wouldn't be able to score points?)
- Done MWright96 (talk) 07:43, 25 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Circuit de Catalunya but was illegible ===>>> Circuit de Catalunya but was ineligible
- Done MWright96 (talk) 07:43, 25 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

2015

Calderón moved from Arden ===>>> Calderón switched teams from Arden
- Done MWright96 (talk) 08:42, 25 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

2019

for the 2019 FIA Formula 2 Championship and the first woman to drive in the series ===>>> for the 2019 FIA Formula 2 Championship and became the first woman to drive in the series
- Done MWright96 (talk) 08:42, 25 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
and she had two race engineers over the season <<<=== Split into a separate sentence, or make clearer how it fits into the current one.
- Done MWright96 (talk) 08:42, 25 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Calderón scored no points and was 22nd in the drivers' standings (add something like ", narrowly missing out on scoring points with an 11th place at (name of LEC / Circuit Paul Ricard race) and four 13th place finishes.")
- Done a little differently to make it concise MWright96 (talk) 08:42, 25 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
attaining a best finish of 25th in the second race ===>>> retiring in the first race and finishing at 25th in last place in the second.
- Done MWright96 (talk) 08:42, 25 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
at the all-female ===>>> on the all-female
- Done MWright96 (talk) 08:42, 25 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Driving style

Calderón's short stature (add "of 5 ft 4 in" with the convert template)
- Done MWright96 (talk) 08:42, 25 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Racing record

Okay.

Overall

Well-sourced.
No dab links.
Can you add short descriptions to the date sub-section headers under racing career to highlight key points (e.g. races, teams, or accomplishments)?
- Added MWright96 (talk) 12:36, 25 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
It's hard to follow all of the different series, but at the same time, I don't think there is a way to fix that.

Very solid! Placing on hold. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 11:37, 25 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

@Sportsfan77777: Have made changes to the article in accordance with the suggestions raised above. MWright96 (talk) 12:36, 25 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
- Passing, good work! Sportsfan77777 (talk) 19:24, 25 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  - MWright96, one more thing: Do you want to add the article to the Women in Green sports goals list for 2020?
    - @Sportsfan77777: Yes. Have added the article to the list MWright96 (talk) 06:21, 28 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

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