Talk:Taruni Sachdev/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 09:58, 3 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

"Taruni Sachdev (14 May 1998 – 14 May 2012) was an Indian child actress. She appeared in Vellinakshatram (2004), Sathyam (2004), Paa (2009), Vetri Selvan (2014), and Kya Aap Paanchvi Pass Se Tez Hain? (2008)." - how about merging these two sentences together and change them accordingly
"Sachdev made her film debut in 2004 with Vellinakshatram which made her endeared by the Malayalam audience." - which endeared her to Malayalam audiences.
"Her last film was Vetri Selvan (2012)," - delink Vetri Selvan since it is already linked in the previous paragraph and change the year to 2014
"which was released after her death in 2012. " - released two years after her death
"near the Jomsom Airport, Nepal." - near Jomsom Airport in Nepal
"She had studied to class nine from the Bai Avabai Framji Petit Girls' High School." - at Bai Avabai Framji Petit Girls' High School.

"Taruni Sachdev was born on 14 May 1998 in Mumbai, India.[1][2] She was born to industrialist Haresh Sachdev and Geeta Sachdev.[3]" - how about merging these two sentences together for flow and shortening it a little accordingly?

"Besides acting, Sachdev had appeared in more than fifty commercials.[1] She appeared in many advertisements of Colgate, ICICI Bank, Saffola oil, and Kesar Badam Milk.[1]" - merge these two sentences and shorten them accordingly
The words action thriller, drama and thriller should be delinked
"In 2009, Sachdev appeared in R. Balki's comedy-drama Paa.[6] Where she starred as Somi," - these two sentences are better off merged together; the word "Where" should not start with a capital letter
"She appeared in many advertisements of" - She appeared in television advertisements for the companies

Title of Reference 11: "We Will Keep Taruni's Scenes As Remembrance - Taruni Sachdev - Vetri Selvan - Rudhran - Tamil Movie News"." - the text highlighted in bold must be delete because it is not necessary at all
Reference 14 is missing Indo-Asian News Service as the agency
Title of Reference 15: "Tears and chants mark Nepal crash victims' last rites | Mumbai News - Times of India" - the text in bold should be delete because it is unnecessary
Reference 15 is missing the authors of the article

Am going to place the review on hold to allow the nominator time to address/query the points raised above. MWright96 (talk) 11:41, 3 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]