Talk:Tantallon Castle/GA1

GA Review

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Commencing review Ben MacDui 17:28, 12 October 2009 (UTC)

Prose quality:

Good throughout (although in general you use too many commas for my liking) - and here are a few specific quibbles.

"There are several small chambers within the walls, and stairs, with arched ceilings, accessing the parapet walk." The are lots of commas here that don't help me. I think you mean:

"There are several small chambers within the walls, and stairs with arched ceilings accessing the parapet walk." rather than

"There are several small chambers within the walls and stairs, with arched ceilings accessing the parapet walk." or even

There are several small chambers within the walls, and stairs with arched ceilings, accessing the parapet walk.

Is there a reason why "curtain wall" is in quotes in the history section? - we already know what you mean.

"The Yester Writs (no.798) record an Andrew..." I would have thought the number should be part of the citation, not the text. See also below.

All fair enough and dealt with.

MoS compliance:

Links to Bailey & Marmion are dabs.

Lead - this should have a brief mention of the ghostly apparition.

Even though its guff? Oh well OK then...

Well of course its guff, but if its got its own section it should really be alluded to. There is an alternative.....

I know, but its there now...

Factual accuracy:

"Tantallon is of a singular construction within Scotland, due to its location on a promontory." It may well be of a singular construction, but this surely cannot be because of the location alone. Dunottar? Dunstaffnage?

Hmm, fair point, will rephrase.

Have reworded this

References to sources:

References 2 & 10 have spaces before the page number, which are inconsistent with the remainder.

Ref 10 is doubly inconsistent- the publication details should be added to the bibliography. Possibly also ref 27, although that's optional.

Ref 22 should end in a period

Bibliography

Historic Manuscripts Commission surely doesn't need a page number. Accounts of the Lord High Treasurer of Scotland likewise (I note the talk page history).

Lindsay (1986) should have a place of publication, and ideally an ISBN.

Maxwell (1902) - assuming Freemantle is the publisher, London is placed inconsistently. Ditto for Embra in MacGibbon (1887).

McKean (2004) through to Tabraham (1997) all lack a place of publication. All converted to {{cite book}} and filled out

Mackay, Elspeth is a dead link. Updated

Image copyright:

There is a query of some kind re File:George Monck 1st Duke of Albemarle Studio of Lely.jpg. I will have to check this out.

Everything uploaded from the NPG has this tag, but the images are still there, so I don't know what their status is. There are other pictures of Monck if its a problem.

It's fine. See User talk:Awadewit. Ben MacDui 07:42, 14 October 2009 (UTC)

Whilst I don't believe it is necessary for this GA candidature I recommend using {{Convert}} for metric/imperial translations. For example {{convert|60|by|120|m|ft}} produces "60 by 120 metres (200 by 390 ft)" without the need to add brackets etc., etc. Ben MacDui 19:23, 12 October 2009 (UTC)

Many thanks for your review. I have started the changes and will address the rest within the next couple of days. Regards, Jonathan Oldenbuck (talk) 17:48, 13 October 2009 (UTC)

OK I think I have now addressed all the points listed above, please go ahead and complete the review. Thanks, Jonathan Oldenbuck (talk) 12:40, 14 October 2009 (UTC)

Passed - good work. Ben MacDui 18:40, 14 October 2009 (UTC)