Talk:Tallahassee (The Office)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Dom497 (talk · contribs) 19:20, 26 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Hello! I will be reviewing this article and will get started as soon as I can!--Dom497 (talk) 19:20, 26 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

Is it reasonably well written?
A. Prose quality:
Quality of the article is excellent.

B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:
See 'Comment' section for more information.
Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
A. References to sources:
Everything in this section looks good.

B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:
All sources are reliable.

C. No original research:
No original research found in the article.
Is it broad in its coverage?
A. Major aspects:
Major aspects of the episode are covered.

B. Focused:
The article remains on-topic for the entire time.
Is it neutral?
Fair representation without bias:
No bias found within the article.
Is it stable?
No edit wars, etc:
Article is stable.
Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:
Infobox picture rationale appears to be filled out correctly. The other picture is from Flickr and license for the photo is correct.

B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
Images are appropriate and the captions are good.
Overall:
Pass or Fail:
As of right now, I can not pass the article. Please see the 'Comment' section for what needs to be fixed. Once these issues are fixed, I will pass the article. The article will be on hold for 7 days (until May 3, 2012). If nothing is fixed by then, I will be forced to fail the article.--Dom497 (talk) 22:38, 26 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

Lead

"According to Nielsen Media Research, "Special Project" drew 4.38 million viewers and received a 2.3 rating/6% share in the 18-49 demographic, marking a twelve percent drop in ratings from the previous episode, "Special Project",...". This statement makes no sense. You are saying that the episode "Special Project" drew 4.38 million viewers which was a 12 percent drop in ratings from the previous episode which is (according to the statement) the same episode.

Plot

"...look as if he had been murdered in order to prank Dwight, going so far as to write "It was Dwight" on the wall in faux-blood." Shouldn't this statement say something like: "...look as if he had been murdered in order to prank Dwight, going as far as to writing "It was Dwight" on the wall in faux-blood."

"Dwight and Erin walk in to find the room in ruins, and Jim lurches out of the closet as if he has been murdered." Writing the sentence like this sounds better: " Dwight and Erin then walk in the room only to find it in ruins. Moments later, Jim lurches out of the closet as if he has been murdered."

"However, he returns three hours after his appendix is removed in order to impress his new boss." Maybe the sentence should be written like this: "However, three hours later, after getting his appendix removed, he returns in order to impress his new boss."

"Meanwhile in Scranton, the office is left without a reception." This should be turned into this: "Meanwhile in Scranton, the office is left without a receptionist."

Production

"Tallahassee" marked the return appearance of Catherine Tate, who previously appeared in the seventh season finale, "Search Committee" as a candidate to replace Michael as office manager.[3] Tate was initially the top choice to join the cast as the manager, but due to a commitment to the West End production of the Shakespeare play, Much Ado About Nothing she was unable to join the series.[4][5]" So you are saying that Tate returned to the show but was unable to join the series at the same time. Makes no sense.

Alright, I believe I've addressed all the issues. Thank you very much for reviewing!--Gen. Quon (talk) 01:14, 27 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]

PASS!!!