Talk:Tal Vez/GA1

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Reviewer: Jens Lallensack (talk · contribs) 22:55, 23 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

for his the One Night Only with Ricky Martin tour, – "his" too much?
The intro states "It was released to radio stations by Sony Discos as the lead single from the album on March 8, 2003", but the infobox, obviously about the single as well, says "March 25, 2003".

I'm sorry, a user kept doing edits, which were vandalism a few weeks ago. (They are blocked now from editing) I thought I have reverted all of them, but it seems I have missed this. The correct date is March 25 per the source. آرمین هویدایی (talk) 10:33, 24 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Main text states "Tal Vez" was released to radio stations as the lead single from the album on March 25, 2003, contradicting the lead sentence (see point above)?
which was supposed to be his first complete work in the field of songwriting – what does this mean, in which way were his other works not "complete"?

The first song he wrote was "Volveras" from A Medio Vivir (album) (1995), but the other tracks were written by other songwriters. This album was meant to be the first album that he co-wrote all of its tracks. If my sentence is not clear, can you please suggest me to write it in another way? آرمین هویدایی (talk) 10:33, 24 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

I think this needs to be clearer, "complete" could mean anything. Maybe "which was supposed to be his first album in which he wrote or co-wrote all songs". --Jens Lallensack (talk) 19:25, 25 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

He initially planned to release the third English-language album as his seventh studio album, which was supposed to be his first complete work in the field of songwriting. Despite Sony Music Entertainment's original plan, he decided to release a Spanish-language album – this is contradicting or at least confusing. Was it "his" original plan or the original plan of "Sony Music Entertainment"?

De Vita had previously composed Martin's 1998 song, "Vuelve" – "," too much?
written by Franco De Vita – introduce in lead? ("Venezuelan singer-songwriter")
an "aching reflection on lost opportunities and last chances".[17][18][19] – This is the quote, but this needs attribution. Who said it? And from which of the three sources is it?
Lead: was filmed in La Boca – maybe add "near Buenos Aires", as this will help most readers.
López managed to capture a real story about universal love, addressing the song's lyrics in the music video. – I think that conflicts with WP:NPOV. That he "managed" to do this is certainly subjective and not a fact, and needs attribution (According to xxx, López managed to …)
The video was uploaded on the singer's YouTube channel on October 3, 2009, but was made unavailable after receiving 27.5 million views.[49] – Citing the Youtube video itself is possibly WP:OR? Next sentence as well?

According to Wikipedia:Video links#As references, "There are channels on YouTube for videos uploaded by agencies and organizations that are generally considered reliable sources, such as the Associated Press's channel. These official channels are typically accepted. Content from the music video site Vevo, where record labels host their artist's music videos and also upload to YouTube, is an example of a primary source that might be used." Also as "a primary source may only be used to make descriptive statements that can be verified by any educated person without specialist knowledge", YouTube views are simply available for anyone without specialist knowledge. I think it is acceptable to use this as a source. Besides, you can check several featured articles such as Diamonds (Rihanna song) and Love the Way You Lie that have used YouTube links as a source for the views. آرمین هویدایی (talk) 10:33, 24 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Done--Thank you so much for devoting your time on it. I fixed all the issues, I hope I haven't missed anything. If I had, please tell me to fix it.آرمین هویدایی (talk) 08:04, 27 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the fixes, and congrats to the GA! --Jens Lallensack (talk) 22:32, 27 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]