Talk:Take Back/GA1

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Reviewer: Cartoon network freak (talk · contribs) 15:16, 13 December 2015 (UTC)

Hi there! I read through the article and saw that this isn't an immediate failure, so I'm going to review it during the upcoming two weeks. Cheers! Cartoon network freak (talk) 15:16, 13 December 2015 (UTC)

@CaliforniaDreamsFan: I'm sorry to dissapoint you, but I have only time to review this next week, as I have to finish the GAN of Didi Tera Devar Deewana. Cartoon network freak (talk) 10:53, 27 December 2015 (UTC)

@Cartoon network freak: No worries, take your time :)

Review

Lead

• remove "(stylized as "TAKE BACK")"; it is not an opportunity to mention the styling; an opportunity would be for example something like "TAke <-Back<-"
• It was written by Koda and produced by Max Matsuura. -> It was written by Koda, while production was handled by Max Matsuura
• Prior to her rise to fame, Koda was inspired by her mother's musical interests, and participated in an open audition where she placed second. As a result, Matsuura signed Koda in late 1999. The song was released as Koda's debut single on December 6, 2000 by record label Rhythm Zone. -> The track was released following Koda's participation in an open audition where she placed second, whereby she signed to Matsuura's label to release this song. "Take Back" premiered on December 6, 2000 as her debut recording. (Remove the part with her mother, as it's not necessary)
• Musically, "Take Back" is a pop and R&B song. -> Musically, the track was described as a pop and R&B song.
• "Take Back" achieved -> It also achieved
• number fifty-nine -> number 59
• and sixty-three -> and 63
• and DJ, Jonathan Peters -> and DJ Jonathan Peters
• number eighteen on the US -> number 18 on the US
• ten -> number 10
• and twenty -> and number 20
• chart in any -> chart on any
• The accompanying music video for "Take Back" was filmed in Tokyo, Japan and New York City by Toku, and features scenes of Koda singing in a white chair with three dancers, and lying down nude while clutching a microphone. -> The accompanying music video for "Take Back" was shot in both Tokyo and New York City by Toku; it features Koda singing while sitting on a white chair, and her lying down nude while clutching a microphone.
• Lead should not include any references

Infobox

• Remove references for Pop and R&B; it's already cited in "Composition".
• Orpheus Records -> Orpheus

@Cartoon network freak: Done.

Background

*Remove "Kumi Koda was born in Kyoto, Japan, to Japanese musicians.[2] Koda was inspired by her mothers musical interests, and followed her footsteps by performing in Japanese karaoke bars and clubs.[2] Koda audition for the Avex Trax "Dream Audition" in elementary school, and every year onwards, but was rejected because of her lack of "groundless confidence".[1] Despite an "obscure" start to high school, in her second year", as the Background section should be about the background of the song, not the background of Kumi; begin the sentence something like: "In 2000, Kuda auditioned for the Avex Trax "Dream Audition" and came second out of 120,000 participants.

• Koda stated that she didn't feel "anxious" about the situation, and spent the 500,000 yen (approximately $4056 USD) money from the Dream Audition towards food. -> At that time, Koda stated that she didn't feel "anxious" about the situation. having already spent 500,000 yen (approximately $4056 USD) she won from the open audition towards food.
• In mid-2000, Koda was asked by Avex to make her promotional debut from a "photo shoot", that was photographed by Japanese photographer, Toku; it was revealed to be the single artwork to "Take Back", which features Koda in a red and gold outfit, standing inside of a lit-up tunnel. Koda stated "During the shooting of the cover of my single "Take Back", no one had told me what the shoot was for so I just stood in front of the camera clueless," -> In mid 2000, Koda was asked by Avex to make her promotional debut through a photo shoot with photographer Toku, which led to the shooting of the cover sleeve for "Take Back". The artwork features her sporting a red and gold outfit, standing outside of a lit-up tunnel. Particularly, Koda said that: "During the shooting of the cover for my single, 'Take Back', no one had told me what the shoot was for, so I was just staying clueless in front of the camera".

Composition

*single, and -> recording and

• "Take Bac" is a "soft" pop[6] and R&B[6][7][8] song. -> "Take Back" has been described as a soft pop and R&B song.[6][7][8]
• According to an interview with Japanese magazine Nippop, "Take Back", along with Koda's earlier work, was strictly R&B music; "Koda didn't get into R&B until Avex signed her to its Rhythm Zone label..." -> During an interview,it was revealed that "Take Back" and Koda's earlier work were strictly oriented to R&B music, as "Koda didn't get into R&B until Avex signed her to its Rhythm Zone label...".
• stated -> stated that:
• remixed the single, and was chosen by Rhythm Zone as the final remix for North America; .> remixed the single; it was chosen by Rhythm Zone as the final remix for that country.
• America; According to Koda, "We hadn't really intended to release it, but remixes were all the rage then."; Avex's New York offices suggested the North American release because they felt it would do well thought the club scene. -> America. According to Koda, "[they] hadn't really intended to release [the remix], but remixes were all the rage then.". Particularly, Avex's New York offices confessed that it would do well thought the club scene.

Commercial reception -> Commercial performance

*Upon its release, Koda "feared" the success of the single in Japan, stating that she was insecure of the singles first week debut and its sales. -> Upon its released, Koda said that she "feared the success of the single in Japan". She also stated that she "was insecure" of the singles' first week and debut sales.

• number sixty-two -> number 62
• fifty-nine -> number 59
• Chart, and -> Chart and
• "Take Back" entered at number sixty-six on the Japanese Count Down TV Chart, and reached sixty-three in its third week; it spent six weeks in the top 100 until re-entering for a final week at ninety-seven. -> The track opened the Japanese Count Down TV Chart at number 66, with it reaching number 63 in its third week on that chart; it spent six weeks in the top 100 until re-entering for a final week at number 97.
• over 22,680 units. -> where? In Japan?
• "Take Back" as Koda's fifty-first best selling single -> the song as Koda's 51 best-selling single
• the Jonathan Peter's remix reached entered at thirty-three -> Jonathan Peter's remix reached entered at number 33
• making her -> making Koda
• "Take Back" peaked at number eighteen, and was recognized by Billboard as the "Greatest Gainer" on the week end issue of May 5, 2001; it stayed in the top fifty for thirteen weeks. -> The remix peaked at number 18 and was recognize by Billboard as the "Greatest Gainer" on the week-end issue of May 5, 2011. It stayed 13 weeks within the top fifty.
• number ten -> number 10
• in that chart -> rank on that chart.
• number twenty -> number 20
• "Take Back"'s -> Its
• Remove ""Take Back"'s successful charting performance in the United States prompt Koda, and her record labels Rhythm Zone, Avex, Sounday, and Orpheus Records, with positive prospects for the following single, "Trust Your Love".[1] "Trust Your Love" reached number nineteen on the Hot Singles Sales chart, thirty-five on the Hot Dance Songs chart,[18] the top spot on the Hot Dance Music/Maxi-Singles Sales chart,[18] and number nineteen on the US Hot 100 chart.[19] This achievement made Koda the first Japanese act to enter the Hot 100 chart since Kyu Sakamoto's 1963 single, "Sukiyaki".[20] Despite the success of both singles, Sounday and Orpheus have not released another single by Koda since 2001.", as this article's about "Take Back", not "Trust Your Love".

Music Video

*The music video was directed by Toku. -> The accompanying music video for "Take Back" was directed by Toku.

• The video took one day to shoot, and two days to edit. -> It took one day to shoot and two days to edit.

@Cartoon network freak: Done.

• of her music DVD, 7 Spirits, -> of her DVD release, 7 Spirits,
• with a "Young -> with a "young
• long, black -> long and black
• black hair, presents -> back hair. She presents
• images -> ways
• first, though -> first one, although
• second -> second one
• she has dishevelled hair with strange things plaited in it, but despite that, with her enthusiasm flowing out from screen, she still very much attracts the viewer's attention. -> she is presented with disheveled hair and strange things plaited in it, but despite that, she still attracts the viewer's attention with her enthusiasm flowing out from the screen.
• In the video, Koda is accompanied by three back-up dancers, who dance in a photo shooting room, with Koda seated, and the three dancers in a white room. -> In the video, Koda is accompanied by by her three fellow background dancers dancers; they're dancing in a white photo shooting room, while Koda is sitting on a white chair.
• Still from the music video "Take Back", showing Koda seated, in front of a multi-coloured LED wall. -> The closing scene from the music video for "Take Back" presents Koda sitting on a white chair in front of a multi-coloured LED wall.
• era; -> era:
• with the singer, and it -> near the singer, so it
• The video has interludes of Koda nude, laying on a crimson red Ferrari, and laying and holding a microphone with steam intercepting them. -> Scenes interspersed through the main video show Koda lying nude on a crimson red Ferrari and clutching a microphone in her hand.
• chair, in -> chair in
• wall, and -> wall and
• 7 Spirits, "didn't appeal to the Japanese audience's tastes,... With some time and perspective, people's opinions of them might change, but the promotional videos for these singles are worth taking a look at." -> 7 Spirits "didn't appeal to the Japanese audience's tastes [...]. With some time, people's opinions of them might change, but they are worth taking a look at.

Critical reception

• was positive in his review, labelling it a "very pleasant song of soft pop and R&B." -> was positive towards the track in his review, labelling it as "a very pleasant soft pop and R&B song".
• scene, hence -> scene hence
• CD Journal was positive -> CD Journal praised "Take Back"
• over viewed -> overviewed
• profile, and -> profile and
• vocals,". -> voclas".
• stated -> stated:
• singers -- "Real Emotion" -> singers. [...] "Real Emotion"

Live performances and other appearances -> Live performances and usage in media

• "Take Back" has been included in numerous tours conducted by Koda -> "Take Back" has been included on numerous tracklists of tours conducted by Koda
• its inclusions are her -> she included the single on her
• "Take Back" was featured -> The track was featured

Credits and personnel

• Instead of Source:, add "Credits adapted from the liner notes of Affection" atop the section.

Charts and certifications -> Charts and sales

• Certifications -> Sales
• Add {{N/A|None}} in the empty field at "Certifications"

Notes

• by Oricon database and are -> by Oricon database are

References

• Jame-World.com -> Jame World

Outcome: On-hold for 7 days. Good luck, CaliforniaDreamsFan! Cartoon network freak (talk) 12:01, 5 January 2015 (UTC)

@Cartoon network freak: Finished all comments above. CaliforniaDreamsFan (talk · contribs} 22:01, 5 January 2016 (UTC)

Congrats, passed! Cartoon network freak (talk) 07:25, 6 January 2016 (UTC)

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