Talk:Tacoma Eastern Railroad

This is my first edit. Here's some things that I wanted to improve about the article but didn't know the best way to.

• It says "the J.F Hart and Company" right towards the start, which seems to be a clear typo, but it's unclear what the actual name is. "J.F Hart and Company"? "The J.F Hart Company"?
• The content of the Plans section has no source and nothing seems to have come of these plans since it was added in 2008. The account that wrote the article originally (including this section) is called "Railstoparadise", which is the same name as one of the sources on this article, and did not do anything but make this page, which implies personal relevance to the plan. I think the section should be removed but didn't want to do that on my own.
• The section on the presidential visit is way too detailed, and also not related to its heading of subsidiary control. I think this should put in its own section and cut down heavily, or reduced to a mention.
• Many bits have a non-encyclopedic tone but I did not know exactly how to rephrase them.
  • "The Hart Brothers may have been concerned" (I'm sure there's a tag for conjecture like this but I don't know what)
  • "The two-mile road was apparently completed"
  • "set out to tap vast stands of virgin forests" / "in a grove of virgin timber"
  • "the timing could not have been worse"
  • "the Tacoma Eastern Railroad languished until the economy rebounded with the free-spending days of the Yukon Gold Rush of 1899."
  • "Mount Rainier National Park would be profoundly changed"
  • "Harry French was a two-fisted, hard-drinking, railroad boomer" (If this is a quote from the book, it should stay, but be cited as a quote.)

MelliferousMae (talk) 09:30, 26 January 2024 (UTC)