Talk:Tōshirō Hitsugaya/GA1

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Reviewer: ChrisGualtieri (talk · contribs) 06:52, 3 January 2014 (UTC) Good Article Checklist[reply]

Well-written -the prose is clear and concise, respects copyright laws, and the spelling and grammar are correct; and it complies with the manual of style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation.
Verifiable with no original research: it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline; it provides in-line citations from reliable sources for direct quotations, statistics, published opinion, counter-intuitive or controversial statements that are challenged or likely to be challenged, and contentious material relating to living persons—science-based articles should follow the scientific citation guidelines; and it contains no original research.
Broad in its coverage: it addresses the main aspects of the topic; and it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style).
Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without bias, giving due weight to each.
Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute.
Illustrated, if possible, by images: images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content; and images are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions.

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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()

3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()

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Disambig links:OK
Reference check: 1 issue

http://www.popcultureshock.com/manga/index.php/manga-recon/bleach-vols-24-25/ - 404ed maybe temporary

Comments: This article is fairly well written and broad in its coverage with the exception of Toshiro's bankai which is not really discussed despite the picture being used to depict it, possibly raising an issue with NFCC. Hitsugaya.jpg is missing the episode credit. Preferably I'd do a one with a sakuga credit from Kenichi Kunsuna or something... but that's just me. I saw some of Shinichi Kurita's stuff earlier, but I don't think you can get a good reliable source for the movies though. I'll leave it up to you though. Some prose fixes:

"Hitsugaya excelled the Soul Reaper academy.." - in the
"In Bleach" goes against WP:MOSFICT.
" by Aizen who has faked his death." - more examples of prose issues.
"To help Ichigo regain his Soul Reaper powers and combat Kugo, captain-commander Genryūsai Shigekuni Yamamoto orders the Soul Reapers to give some of their spirit energy." - "give Ichigo" you mean.

Not much else in terms of the actual prose issues, but that MOSFICT matter is an issue here. I'll place it on hold for fixes, its not bad, but just needs to fix copy edited for the Appearances and some info on his bankai added. ChrisGualtieri (talk) 17:10, 6 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]

What can you say, @ChrisGualtieri:? Gabriel Yuji (talk) 03:37, 9 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]

I may say bankai information is fancruft, and I even don't know if that image is necessary. For instance, the word "bankai" is not even mentioned in Rukia Kuchiki that is a GA from a Bleach character. Gabriel Yuji (talk) 20:42, 9 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]

It is really borderline, but I think I could pass it. Though since it is out there... shouldn't it be added if possible? It would be like three sentences at most. ChrisGualtieri (talk) 04:43, 11 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Ow man, it's seems a great information to be included, from the viewpoint, off course. Also, where in text there is a good place to fit it, and mantain the structure? I can't imagine it in an encyclopedic way or in way that it would seem to be dropped at random there. If you have a suggestion to do it, I wouldn't oppose but I think it's really difficult. Gabriel Yuji (talk) 05:06, 11 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]

You can detail bankai after the second sentence. The first two sentences seemed to act like an intro. "His sword's name is blah blah and allows him to manipulate ice. The sword's bankai name is blah blah which gives him a dragon themed armor made of ice granting him higher mobility; his bankai also increases his ice manipulation powers." Then you'll have to redo the sentence after it to fix the flow. DragonZero (Talk · Contribs) 08:03, 18 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Passed. The bankai issue is trivial at this point. Added or not added, I won't hold this up. ChrisGualtieri (talk) 17:00, 19 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]