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GA Review

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This review is transcluded from Talk:Sylvester McGrew/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Nominator: BeanieFan11 (talk · contribs) 00:21, 17 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: Gonzo fan2007 (talk · contribs) 14:55, 17 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]


I'll take this one. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 14:55, 17 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

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  • No need to define NFL again in the early life section.
  • he made three sacks and a fumble recovery I am not sure "made" is the right word for sacks. Maybe "had"?
  • He became a defensive tackle at Tulane. maybe "converted to" or "transitioned to" instead of "became"
  • on c. July 18, 1986, to play defensive end recommend dropping the circa and just saying "in July 1986"
  • 'B' team or not, it's got to help." the quote should go inside the period.
  • Ref spot check:
    • Add access-dates to Ref 1, 2, 21
    • References formatted consistently
    • Refs are citing the material within the article appropriately.

Nice work BeanieFan11! « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 18:34, 17 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.