Talk:Swiss Cottage Library/GA1

GA Review

Passed. Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 14:18, 27 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

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Reviewer: Lee Vilenski (talk · contribs) 15:51, 26 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Hello, I am planning on reviewing this article for GA Status, over the next couple of days. Thank you for nominating the article for GA status. I hope I will learn some new information, and that my feedback is helpful.

If nominators or editors could refrain from updating the particular section that I am updating until it is complete, I would appreciate it to remove a edit conflict. Please address concerns in the section that has been completed above (If I've raised concerns up to references, feel free to comment on things like the lede.)

I generally provide an overview of things I read through the article on a first glance. Then do a thorough sweep of the article after the feedback is addressed. After this, I will present the pass/failure. I may use strikethrough tags when concerns are met. Even if something is obvious why my concern is met, please leave a message as courtesy.

Best of luck! you can also use the {{done}} tag to state when something is addressed. Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)}

Please let me know after the review is done, if you were happy with the review! Obviously this is regarding the article's quality, however, I want to be happy and civil to all, so let me know if I have done a good job, regardless of the article's outcome.

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Prose

Lede

Cottage Library is the central library of the public library service - can we say this without saying library three times? Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 21:12, 26 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Done, changed but still a bit... meh

What even is a "central library"? Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 21:12, 26 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Done changed to primary library

Notably, the building shows... - if you have to say something is notable, it's probably not notable. Just say "the building shows...". Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 21:12, 26 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Done

Are swimming baths the same as swimming pools? Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 21:12, 26 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

In essence, yes, but sources exclusively refer to them as "baths": I've wikilinked swimming baths now so hopefully that helps.

General

library, Kilburn Library, was opened in 1894, but was soon succeeded in 1897 by the borough's first central library: Finchley Road Library - same issue as lede. Continuous overuse of "library" and what is a central library? Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 21:24, 26 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Done

In 1989 Camden reported that the swimming baths - this is the first use of the word baths outside of the lede - how would you know these existed? Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 21:24, 26 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

I've amended "sports centre" earlier on to swimming baths to be more appropriate, though in the whole the difference is a bit confusing, I've made an attempt to clarify it in brackets.

original masterplan - is this a quote or something? Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 21:24, 26 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Yep, apologies,

changed

The construction section seems quite small - I feel it would be better served being merged with some of the other info. Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 21:24, 26 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

I've merged this upwards

The overall centre redevelopment plan, including the demolition of Swiss Cottage Sports Centre and construction of Swiss Cottage Leisure Centre, designed by Sir Terry Farrell, was finished in 2007 at a cost of £85 million.[9]
Whilst the accompanying sport centre's demolition was not controversial, it removed the library's complimenting twin, which was factored into new designs. - so what I read about this is that they took down the sports center, and made a new one somewhere else? I feel that could be made a bit more explicit. Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 21:24, 26 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

You're right, it was built on the site of the old demolished swimming baths and I've clarified that.

both locals and at a more national level.[ - "both locally and nationally". Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 21:24, 26 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Done

Review meta comments

I'll begin the review as soon as I can! If you fancy returning the favour, I have a list of nominations for review at WP:GAN and WP:FAC, respectively. I'd be very grateful if you were to complete one of these if you get time. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 15:51, 26 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Lee Vilenski, thanks a lot for taking this on, I'll have a look at reviewing one of the articles you've linked above. A lot of these sources are purely offline and I've made scans of some of them, so if you want a specific source I can send a scan if I have it. – Isochrone (T) 13:00, 27 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Nah, that's fine. As it's a spot check I'll just check some online ones 2,19 and 35 all came up fine, so I'm happy to pass. Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 14:18, 27 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.