Talk:Susanna de Vries

Susanna de Vries biographical details

page 1 block under photo amend Spouse to read Professor Larry Evans (correct title has been ommitted CAREER (THIS SECTION VERY RIGHTLY SAYS EDIT AND I HAVE RECEIVED COMPLAINTS IT IS ILLITERATE WHICH IS NOT GOOD FOR A WRITER'S BIOG content ok but ungrammatical please help 1st para line 5 (spacing wrong space betwen lines 1 and 2 should be removed. LINE 4 University of Technology's Department add apostrophe

change please.. due to concerns over legal complications after identifying forged Australian and European paintings.   

2nd para FIRST LINE Pandanus Press . PLEASE REMOVE The ENTIRE NEXT SENTENCE AS IT DOES NOT MAKE SENSE, I HAVE NO IDEA WHAT IT MEANS AND NOR DO MY READERS AND i HAVE RECEIVED COMPLAINTS. tHE GENTLEEMAN WHO WROTE IT WAS VERY KIND AND VISITED ME ADN PARTS ARE GOOD AMD INFO IS CORRECT AND HE OBVIOUSLY WORKED HARD ON IT BUT i AM NOT SURPRISED IT SAYS EDIT AS PARTS OF IT DO NOT MAKE SENSE ADN FULL OF GRAMMATICAL ERRORS. lINE 4 PARA 2 Launched by Governor Leneen Forde Pirgos Press (Pirgos is the Greek word for 'tower'as the company's logo is the silhouette of the Byzantine tower featured in Susanna's award winning title 'Blue Ribbons, Bitter Bread' now in its 7th edition and first published by Hale and Iremonger of Sydney and in 2016 was translated into Greek by Maria Dia. . para 3 De Vries has travelled to Europe to authenticate artworks is pretty meaningless. say instead authenticate Australian 19th century paintings on which she has written and lectured.

OTHER ACTIVITIES. GRAMMATICAL ERRORS LINE 5 ' SOME OF THE EARNINGS FROM HER PUBLICATIONS ARE (NOT IS) PERSONAL LIFE. LINE ONE. She married Dr (later Professor) Larry Evans in 1967 in London. date wrong was not 1962. PUBLISHED WORKS WRITING STYLE DESCRIBED AS 'mainstream' delete deadpan or delete whole sentence. Because her biographies cover some women written about for the first time and are very readable and bought by libraries many have gone into multiple editions and are still in print. please remove teh rest of the sentence it does not make sense.

final sentence should read De Vries has explored the lives of significant women whose stories deserved to be better known.

books

Ethel Carrick Fox, Triumphs and Travels of an Impressionist. TO HELL AND BACK add full title The Banned Story of Gallipoli with a Biography of Sydney Loch. Royal Feud, Diana versus Charles and Camilla. 2017 (only available in USA) A Colourful Life, the Memoirs of Susanna de Vries. (in preparation for 2018) — Preceding unsigned comment added by 124.170.141.140 (talk) 09:22, 17 May 2017 (UTC) Note: Above was originally posted to The Biographies of Living Persons Noticeboard; I have copied it here so that the editors of this page will know about it and respond appropriately. --Nat Gertler (talk) 22:32, 21 May 2017 (UTC)

Thank you for your suggestions. A couple quick notes:

• Wikipedia tends to avoid putting Professor (or Doctor or similar titles) before names, particularly where it is not directly relevant (i.e., "Professor" is not a credential toward being a spouse.)
• The term "edit" appears by default next to most section headers. It is not intended as a suggestion that that section is in more-than-usual need of editing; it is a link that can be clicked to edit just that section, rather than opening up the whole page for editing. --Nat Gertler (talk) 22:45, 21 May 2017 (UTC)

I've done another run on things. I've deleted some of the sentences you had concerns about, although less for any concern about whether the sentences could be comprehended, and more for concern regarding source. Much of the material in the article lacks any stated source, much less a source that reaches our standard for being a reliable source.

I have not deleted the "deadpan mainstream" quote (although I did adjust its formatting.) It is presented as a quote from a source. I do not have access to that source, my default presumption is that it is accurately quoting that source.

The suggested sentence "De Vries has explored the lives of significant women whose stories deserved to be better known" should not be added. It puts opinions into Wikipedia's voice. Wikipedia does not have opinions on which women are significant, nor which have stories that deserve to be better known.

--Nat Gertler (talk) 00:32, 22 May 2017 (UTC)

Suggestions for improvement and corrections

Wikimedia received a communication identifying issues in this article. I have obtained permission from the writer to share the list here.

Please be aware that the list was prepared in May 2017, so some of the points may be moot.--S Philbrick(Talk) 16:23, 20 October 2017 (UTC)

EARLY LIFE & eDUCATION PARA 2 LINE 3 began working in the library of the University of Queensland. not for a library details in box under photo shoulkd give my late husban'ds proper title PROFESSOR Larry Evans MRC Psych. and this should apper in line 4 of second para as Professor Larry Evans (he was very famous in his field, far more famous than me.)

CAREER LINE 4 for QUT ( Queensland University of Technology's Department of Architecture and teh Built Environment

LIne 5 this does not make sense. shold read 'due to concerns over legal complications after identifying art forgeries

PARA 2 founded Pandanus Press with Barbara Ker Wilson as editor in chief. (this sentence which is there does not make sense at all as eaders have pointed out so please delete someting so embarassing. ) Pandanus Press was launched by Governor Leneen Forde

PARA 3 de Vrie has travelled around Australia and Europe authenticatng works of art of Australian and European origin and finding illustrations for her books. IN 1996 she and her late husband .... to conduct reserach into her most Woman now in its 7th edition.

AWARDS

iN 1975 a (not the there are more than one) Winston Churchill

OTHER ACTIVITIES

In 1990 she made a world tour to interview leading collectors of Impressionist paintings for her book IMPRESSIONS REVEALED MASTERPIECES AND COLLECOR and interrviewed famous art collectors like the Queen Mother and Elizabeth Taylor and was allowed to photograph some of their paintings EITEHR PUT THIS IN OR LEAVE OUT BUT CURRENT SENTENCE MAKES NO SENSE AT ALL.

PUBLISHED WORKS.

eITHER REMOVE TEH QUOTE ABOUT WRITING STYLE FROM DAPHNE GUINNESS who was not a literary critic or remove the word deadpan which makes no sense to me or anhone else have been asked to explain it and can't

remove teh sentence starting Because as it is repeated in last sentence and second half of the sentence is a nonse. You can say that many of her books have gone into multiple editions and are still in print or in libraries worldwide.

funding kindly provided by the late Dame Elizabeth Murdoch who saw de Vries as a friend and one of her favourite authors.

title is incomplete of EThel Carrick Fox. add Travels and Triumph of an Impressionist.

title incomplet eTo HELL AND BACK; THE BANNED STORY OF GALLIPOLI & BIOGRAPHY OF AUTHOR SYNDEY LOCH.