Talk:Superstar (Marina song)/GA1

GA Review

Article (edit | visual edit | history) · Article talk (edit | history) · Watch

Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 17:48, 29 July 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Good Article review progress box

Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()

3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()

Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

Reviewing one of your articles once again, this time I'll be going for one of the oldest songs nominees currently. --K. Peake 17:48, 29 July 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox and lead

Remove hlist from the infobox
Remove venue parameter as that is only for live recordings
Link to the music video
"for her fourth studio album," → "from her fourth studio album,"
Swap order of writing and release sentences
Target single to Single (music)
"and produced by" → "while produced by"
"she demanded when creating the parent album." → "she demanded, lacking from her previous albums, when creating it."
Target ballad to Sentimental ballad
"that was compared often" → "that was often compared"
"its lyrics describe" → "the lyrics describe"
"received a generally mixed response" → "received generally mixed reviews"
"songwriting on the track was" → "lyrics for the song were"
"which divided critics." not enough reviews to make such a claim so remove it
"A music video featuring the" → "A music video for the" with the appropriate wikilink
"room and gives the impression" → "room, while giving the impression"
"was also included on the setlist to" → "was included on the setlist for"
This sentence should come directly before the first about the acoustic version

Background and release

"She explained that" → "She explained that,"
"After her announcement, she" → "After the announcement, Marina"
"her first new single under the name," → "her first single under the new name," with the appropriate target
"She also announced Love + Fear" → "She announced Love + Fear"
"and first under her new name." →"and first as Marina."
"The track listing for the project was revealed the same day," → "The track listing was revealed the same day,"
"composed of two acts" → "that is composed of two segments,"
"she specifically asked her label" → "that she specifically asked her record label Atlantic Records" with the wikilink
"She justified this request," → "She justified the request,"
"creative control in her" → "creative control for her"
"and did not this" → "and did not want this"
"and produced by" → "with production being handled by"
"Marina performed her vocals" → "Marina recorded her vocals" since it otherwise sounds like a live performance
"was sent to music distributors such as Amazon Music and Spotify for" → "was released for"
"on 1 March 2019 through Atlantic Records." → "in various countries on 1 March 2019 through Marina's record label."
"It was marketed as" → "It served as"
"A promotional CD single intended for radio airplay was distributed in" → "A promotional CD single, intended for radio airplay, was distributed throughout" with the targets
Remove wikilink on Benelux
"was also recorded and included on the track listing for" → "was later recorded and released as the fourth track on"

Composition and lyrics

"what the rest of the album" → "what the rest of Love + Fear"
"on Marina's second studio album," → "on Marina's second studio album"
"called the song" → "called the track"
"of a piano on the track." → "of a piano."
"According to the official sheet music published at Musicnotes.com," → "According to the sheet music at Musicnotes.com,"
"is set in common time and has" → "is set in the time signature of common time, and has"
Target key to Key (music)
"in the chord progressions of" → "in the chord progression of" with the wikilink
This sentence implies John Hanes engineered the song at MixStar Studios; is that correct or does it need rewording?
Remove wikilink on Virginia
"In an interview with Apple Music during" → "In an interview with Apple Music, during" with the wikilink
"agreed in calling it a love song, citing the lyric" → "also called it a love song and cited the line,"
"Following an instrumental introduction to" → "Following the instrumental intro to"
"begins the first verse singing:" → "begins the first verse by singing:"
"She alternates to" → "She alternates to,"
"during the second verse." → "at the beginning of the second verse."

Critical reception

"calling attention to its lyrics," → "calling attention to the lyrics,"
"Wass wrote a review of the single, where he highlighted the lyrics and" → "Wass highlighted the song's lyrics and its"
"her prior releases, and considered this combination" → "Marina's prior releases, and considered the combination"
"favorite part to be the lyric," → "favorite part to be the lyrics,"
"Peyton Thomas from Pitchfork called this same lyric" → "Peyton Thomas of Pitchfork called the same lyrics"
"some more from the song and considered" → "some more from the song, considering"
"The acoustic version of the song was" → "The acoustic version of "Superstar" was"
"Mike Nied from Idolator provided" → "Mike Nied of Idolator provided"

Promotion

Img looks good
Wikilink lyric video per MOS:LINK2SECT
"of Marina in a black dress" → "of Marina in a black dress while"
"was released on 1 March." → "was released on 1 March 2019."
"An official music video for the song" → "A music video for the acoustic version of the song" to be more specific
"account on 13 September 2019." → "channel on 13 September of that year."
"is the first of three released" → "was the first of three released"
"with her hair arranged" → "and her hair is arranged"
"was also included on the set list" → "was included on the set list"
"who reviewed Marina's show" → "reviewing Marina's show"
"it "didn’t" → "it "didn't"

Track listing

Digital download/promotional CD single/streaming → Digital download/streaming/promotional CD single

Credits and personnel

Writers should come first, followed by producers and add that credit before keys in the order

Release history

See MOS:TABLECAPTION
Format → Format(s)
Distributor → Label(s)
Digital download and streaming should be separated with the targets
Centre the refs
Add the promotional CD single here

References

Make sure all of these are archived by using the tool
Copyvio score looks good at 23.7%
Cite numerous countries for ref 8 to verify that the release was various and put the retailers in brackets; (CA) for example
Remove refs 10 and 11 since Apple Music verifies digital download/streaming
Remove target on Marina for ref 13
Retitle ref 30 to Motion and cite Nikko La Mere instead for publisher

External links

(Audio video) → (Audio Video)
Remove the music video from here

Final comments and verdict

On hold and I am sorry about the delay in the review, I was a bit stressed out about some real life issues yesterday. --K. Peake 08:55, 31 July 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Kyle Peake – no worries. I believe I addressed all of your comments through my editing. Please let me know if there is anything else I can do for this review. Thanks again, Carbrera (talk) 18:45, 7 August 2020 (UTC).[reply]

Carbrera You did not add a caption to the release history table, also I did not mean to put the countries in brackets for the Amazon citations; fix these issues please. --K. Peake 08:38, 8 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Kyle Peake – my apologies. I believe I took care of it now. Carbrera (talk) 17:50, 8 August 2020 (UTC).[reply]

Carbrera Looks like you misinterpreted my statement; I meant that the Amazon refs stay the same apart from the countries in brackets being removed, while you fix the publisher so Amazon.com (UK) → Amazon.co.uk, for example. --K. Peake 20:16, 8 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Kyle Peake – Sorry, what about now? Carbrera (talk) 00:59, 10 August 2020 (UTC).[reply]

Carbrera Did some slight copy editing to fix the Amazon citations, but it looks fine now. --K. Peake 05:11, 10 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]