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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 15:09, 29 August 2016 (UTC)
I will review this. MWright96 (talk) 15:09, 29 August 2016 (UTC)
- It is reasonably well written.
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
- a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- No edit wars, etc.:
- It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- Overall:
- Pass/Fail:
- Pass/Fail:
Premise and setting
[edit]- Celestial Object, Gravitional force and Wii Message Board are dab links
- Fixed. JAGUAR 18:44, 29 August 2016 (UTC)
- "that provide access to the forty-two galaxies available in the game" - forty-two should be in number form for consistency
- Good catch. JAGUAR 18:44, 29 August 2016 (UTC)
Controls
[edit]- Ice skating is a dab link
Power-ups and lives
[edit]- Health meter and checkpoint are dab links
Plot
[edit]- Mushroom Kingdom is linked twice
- Removed. JAGUAR 18:44, 29 August 2016 (UTC)
- Remove the outer space wikilink since its already in the gameplay section
- Removed. JAGUAR 18:44, 29 August 2016 (UTC)
Development
[edit]- Remove both links to outer space
- " life meter to 3 from 8" - spell out 3 and 8
- "Miyamoto thought that it was too easy and lacked insensitivity, asserting that a game loses its excitement when it is made too easy." - reptition of too easy
- Rephrased. JAGUAR 18:46, 29 August 2016 (UTC)
- "Shimizu also had a negative reaction to the idea. Shimizu" - usage of "Shimizu" in close proximity
- "Iwata noted that Mario's Bee Suit was popular with women, and also stated that Mario's other suits were designed to add variations to the gameplay." - the character would be better to avoid reptition
- Done, thanks. JAGUAR 18:46, 29 August 2016 (UTC)
Music
[edit]- "Yokota almost quit his job," - quit is American style spelling
- Yeah, perhaps. I've used "resigned" instead. JAGUAR 18:49, 29 August 2016 (UTC)
- "in contrast to the tropical sounds of Super Mario Bros.. " - remove the second full stop
- Super Mario Bros. has a full stop in its title, so the full stop after the game is correct. You should have seen the fun I had with Nights into Dreams...! JAGUAR 18:49, 29 August 2016 (UTC)
Reception
[edit]- " stating that the control schemes more subtle and persuasive as opposed to the "vigorous literalism" of The Legend of Zelda: Twilight Princess." - missing "were"
- Good catch! JAGUAR 18:50, 29 August 2016 (UTC)
References
[edit]- Reference 29 is dead
- Wayback Machine couldn't find it, so I had to remove it. JAGUAR 18:57, 29 August 2016 (UTC)
- References 59 and 60 are lacking access dates
Overall very-well written. Possibly one of your best works. On hold for now. MWright96 (talk) 18:29, 29 August 2016 (UTC)
- @MWright96: thanks for the review, and the compliment! I've addressed all of the issues. I might even consider taking this to FA, which I strangely wasn't aiming for. JAGUAR 18:57, 29 August 2016 (UTC)
- @Jaguar: Best of luck if you choose the FA route. Promoting to GA class. MWright96 (talk) 19:02, 29 August 2016 (UTC)