Talk:Stoned at the Nail Salon/GA1
Appearance
GA Review
[edit]GA toolbox |
---|
Reviewing |
Article (edit | visual edit | history) · Article talk (edit | history) · Watch
Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 21:19, 3 September 2021 (UTC)
Comments
- Could link Universal Music New Zealand.
- "featuring backing vocals from four other musicians" you already said this.
- Done Removed the unnecessary repetition. --LivelyRatification (talk) 07:30, 7 September 2021 (UTC)
- "and "Solar Power", the" link.
- Lead should probably cover how well it did and how critics received it.
- Not done Added information on critical reception to lede, but not really sure what to add re: the song's performance. Chart-wise, there wasn't anything that remarkable aside from "it charted", except for maybe its no 22 placement in NZ. --LivelyRatification (talk) 07:30, 7 September 2021 (UTC)
- "second single[2] from" odd place for a ref.
- Done Moved [2] ref to end of sentence. --LivelyRatification (talk) 07:30, 7 September 2021 (UTC)
- " D major" link.
- "beats per minute" link.
- Rolling Stone doesn't need to be piped.
- "previous single, "Solar Power".[4] Also" overlinked now.
- Done Removed link to Solar Power. --LivelyRatification (talk) 07:30, 7 September 2021 (UTC)
- "Thumbs" and Clairo's" overlinked.
- Done Removed link to Clairo. --LivelyRatification (talk) 07:30, 7 September 2021 (UTC)
- "drew comparison by ... who noted the difference" this feels like it's saying sort of the same thing.
- Done Changed to read ""Stoned at the Nail Salon" drew comparison by critics to Lorde's (pictured) earlier work." --LivelyRatification (talk) 07:30, 7 September 2021 (UTC)
- "of The Guardian wrote" overlinked.
- "for The Telegraph, Neil" The Daily Telegraph?
- "on the Billboard Hot" overlinked.
- "appeared at #85" avoid using hash for number.
- "Shaffer of Rolling Stone, "sings " overlinked.
- "guitar".[36] Billboard writer" overlinked.
- Ref 38 has a spaced hyphen, should be en-dash.
That's all I have for now. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 10:43, 4 September 2021 (UTC)
- @The Rambling Man: Sorry for not getting to this until now, for some reason this wasn't on my watchlist and I missed it. Anyway, I've made most of the changes here, just have some quibbles about one of them. --LivelyRatification (talk) 07:30, 7 September 2021 (UTC)