Talk:Stingray Nebula/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Lord Roem (talk) 22:20, 23 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Section-by-section review

Lead

Take out "Browbowski 94" in parenthetical cite here. Change it to a ref with the <ref></ref> tags.
Change "The Stingray" to "The nebula"
Make " and it is located 18k light years away" into a separate sentence.
You make reference to "Bowbowski, et al." Say who the "et al. is". For example: "Browbowski and other researchers at the University of X ..."
Wikilink "magnitude" as it has a certain meaning in in Astronomy contexts
Make the "--" dash into an —

History

Explain what an 'emission line star' is.
Put the full name of the acronym organization
Remove the parenthetical cite. The ref link to the source is fine.
Move the cite from "Browbowski" to the end of "observed it"
Explain why it is called the Stingray Nebula and put a cite for him/her using the Hubble to find it. It may be the same source saying he/she found it.
Confused here. It says it was observed as a PPNe - how does it make Bobrowski the 'finder'?

PNN

Notes

Fix the notes so that the 'a' subpoint is the sole thing in the 'notes' section while the other cites can go under a "References" heading.

Concluding Thoughts

This article is very short and thus may not meet the GA mandate that an article be broad it its scope of the topic. I suggest putting more information in to expand the article.
This will be placed "on hold", allowing a week's time to fix the article before I make an assessment for GA. If you have any questions, feel free to post it on my talk page. Best regards, Lord Roem (talk) 22:35, 23 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Other misc. issues

Lead doesn't need cite
Lead should be a summary of the information. Some of the content is not referenced in the lead and visa versa.

No attempt to resolve concerns --> GA nominations will be failed. Lord Roem (talk) 02:50, 30 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]