Talk:Sticky bomb/GA1
GA Review
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Lede
[edit]- I'd change "also known" to "commonly known", firstly because it was and secondly to link up with the page location, which is where it is thanks to "most common name".
- Done!
- "The grenade was one of a number of anti-tank weapons designed for use by the British Army and Home Guard as an ad hoc solution to a lack of sufficient anti-tank guns in the aftermath of the Dunkirk evacuation. Designed by a team from MD1 under Major Millis Jefferis" - any chance you could find an alternative to one of the "designed"? It reads as repetition.
- Done!
- "tank or vehicle" - surely a tank is a vehicle? Recommend "vehicle" or "tank or other vehicle".
- Done
- Perhaps an account of any operational success, such as the destruction of six German tanks in North Africa?
- Unfortunately, I'm not sure there's anything else I can add. Only a few sources even mentioned they were used in combat - which surprised me - and even then only in miniscule detail.
- I meant add the detail already there (that six tanks were destroyed, for example) into the lead, so as to present both sides of the bomb, as it were. Ironholds (talk) 13:14, 11 September 2009 (UTC)
- Ohhh, I see. Done!
- I meant add the detail already there (that six tanks were destroyed, for example) into the lead, so as to present both sides of the bomb, as it were. Ironholds (talk) 13:14, 11 September 2009 (UTC)
- Unfortunately, I'm not sure there's anything else I can add. Only a few sources even mentioned they were used in combat - which surprised me - and even then only in miniscule detail.
Development
[edit]- "Given these shortcomings, what weapons were left were allocated to the British Army, and the Home Guard" - perhaps change "what weapons were left" to something highlighting that it was whatever outdated anti-tank weapons were used. At the moment it reads as "they had only 167 anti-tank guns, which wasn't enough, so the remaining anti-tank guns were given to them" - confusing.
- Done!
- "The grenades were produced by the Kay Brothers Company, a chemical manufacturing firm in Stockport, and between 1940 and 1943 approximately 2.5 million were produced" repetition of "produced".
- Done
Design
[edit]- "from which the nickname 'sticky bomb' was derived. " perhaps an inline?
- Done!
- And that's about it. Ironholds (talk) 12:31, 11 September 2009 (UTC)