Talk:Stew-Roids/GA2

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Reviewer: Gen. Quon (talk · contribs) 05:14, 8 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Image: A) NFCC#8 states that an image should be present "only if its presence would significantly increase readers' understanding of the topic, and its omission would be detrimental to that understanding"… This doesn't really help the reader understand the article anymore than words B) It also isn't the subject of critical commentary
Lede: Stewie, Peter(also voiced by MacFarlane) -> "Stewie, Peter (also voiced by MacFarlane)" Space between 'Peter' and the parenthesis
Lede: Unlink 'criticizm' per OVERLINK
Plot: "The Joe and Bonnie host" Kill 'The'
Plot: Joe is wikilinked twice in this section. Get rid of the second one
Plot: "...while parodying The Rocky and Bullwinkle Show." Move to "cultural references" and add a citation
Plot: "Like the season 2 episode "He's Too Sexy for His Fat", the plot-line is never resolved, and his body returns to normal at the end of the episode, with no explanation." Get rid of this, as it does not really add anything to the article
Plot: "Stewie then ends the episode by saying 'I Flew Today'". Is this needed?
Production: "The role of Kevin Swanson, that has been portrayed by several people including actor Jon Cryer (second season episode "There's Something About Paulie") and by series creator and executive producer Seth MacFarlane (all subsequent appearances, including his first), was…" -> "The role of Kevin Swanson, who had has been portrayed by several people including actor Jon Cryer in the second season episode "There's Something About Paulie" and by series creator and executive producer Seth MacFarlane in all previous and subsequent appearances, was…"
Production: Both Lisa Wilhoit and Alex Sulkin are Wikilinked more than one. Remove the subsequent links
Cultural references: "Spike TV was also parodied." How was it parodied?
Cultural references: Following Silence of the Lambs, there should be a semicolon, and not a comma
Cultural references: "poop" -> something more encyclopedic (feces, excrement, etc).
Cultural references: Lady and the Tramp should be italicized
Cultural references: Add who sang "We Built This City"
Cultural references: "He-Man" is the main character. The show is called Masters of the Universe, and should be italicized.
Reception: You mention that it dropped slightly from last week. Do you have a citation for last weeks episode?
Reception: Explain what a Nielsen rating is (i.e. The episode received a 4.0/6 percent share in the Nielsen Ratings This means that roughly 4.0 percent of all television-equipped households, and 6 percent of households watching television, were tuned in to the episode.)
Reception: Add a citation after every direct quotation
Reception: Link IGN
Reception: Italicize The A.V. Club
Reception: "…anymore — 18 minutes…" Remove the spaces around the emdash, or use an endash instead
Reception: Always place the title of the episode in quotes, such as in the first sentence of the last paragraph
Reception: Family Guy Karaoke should be in quotes
References: Use consistent dating methods (either YYYY-MM-DD, or MMMMM DD, YYYY)
References: Change 20th Centruy Fox to Fox Broadcasting Company and link
References: The publisher for Refs. 2, 3, and 6 should be Yahoo! TV; kill the "Yahoo! TV" bit in the titles
References: should use endashes instead of dashes
References: in Ref. 4 AV Club should be linked and italicized; should also have proper title (i.e. 'Stew-Rods' | Family Guy | TV Club | TV)
References: Do you know who wrote, Ref. 9, or when it was published?
References: Link Zap2It
References: Ref. 13, AV Club should be italicized

Those are the issues. Fix them and I will pass it. On hold for seven days.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 14:34, 8 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

I believe I'm done with everything except the image issue. Do you want me to get rid of it? Pedro J. ^{the rookie} 23:53, 8 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
OK, I made a few changes. Here are a few more issues I found:
Make sure you use consistent dating method. That hasn't happened yet
For the "The role of Kevin Swanson, who had" paragraph, can you add a citation to show that Cryer and MacFarlane were the voices

That's it.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 03:32, 9 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Dates formatted and eliminated the MacFarlane part since I could not find a reliable source with that info. Pedro J. ^{the rookie} 23:28, 9 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Excellent. Passes.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 02:23, 10 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]