Talk:Steven Donziger/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Some Dude From North Carolina (talk · contribs) 01:23, 9 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Hey, I'm going to be reviewing this article. Expect comments by the end of the week. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 01:23, 9 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

Add alt text and "upright" to every image.
"18 May 2020" → "May 18, 2020" (consistency; American English)
Add a serial comma after "Toronto Star".
Remove the comma after "law school in 1991".
"which produced" → "that produced"
"Washington, D.C.." → "Washington, D.C."
"his visit to" → "he visited"
"In order to avoid" → "To avoid"
Add a serial comma after the first use of "Brazil".
Wall Street Journal → The Wall Street Journal (every time)
"judgement" → "judgment" (both times; American English)
Add commas after "against it", "witness tampering", "phones"
"defences" → "defenses" (American English)
"a payment" - is the "a" necessary?
"attorney–client" → "attorney-client" (WP:DASH)
"misdemeanour" → "misdemeanor" (American English)
"additional moneys" - typo?
"concerns about coronavirus" → "coronavirus concerns"
"coronavirus" - you mean the COVID-19 pandemic, right?
Add a hyphen between "six month".
Add a serial comma after "GQ magazine".
"which has" → "that has"
Add a comma after Alexandria Ocasio-Cortez.
"favoured" → "favored" (American English)
Try avoiding having every paragraph start with "In [Year], this happened..."
The last sentence in #In_popular_culture needs a source.
I suggest merging #Personal_life and #In_popular_culture.
Add this date template to fix references.
Wikilink websites in prose and in references.
Archive sources manually or using this tool.
FAIR → Fair
Citation #5 is missing a date.
Citation #30 is missing a website.
Citation #31 is missing an access-date.
Citation #42 should be properly cited.
Wikilink Jonathan Watts and Alexander Zaitchik.
Every reference should use the "last, first" name template (see #16).
Mark references from Rolling Stone with "|url-access=limited".
Mark references from The New York Times with "|url-access=limited".
Mark references from Wall Street Journal with "|url-access=subcription".

Good evening Some Dude From North Carolina. I have been through the list of comments and, in most cases, made the recommended changes. I still need to rewrite the article to reduce the instances of "In [Year], this happened...". I have a few questions about the comments:

Changing Wall Street Journal to The Wall Street Journal: In one instance I changed the sentence structure to avoid saying "A The Wall Street Journal editorial ..." which would have sounded odd.

Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 16:08, 11 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]

additional moneys : The source does use that expression. Merriam-Webster says "in some scenarios, especially when it refers to discrete sums of money obtained from a particular source or allocated to a particular cause, money can be pluralized as moneys or monies, with the latter being the more common spelling".

Thanks for the explanation. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 16:08, 11 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Wikilinking Jonathan Watts and Alexander Zaitchik. These only appear in references. The solution I used for wikilinking them may not be appropriate. Are you able to check please?

Done Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 16:08, 11 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]

I changed FAIR to Fair. However, the name is an acronym and is capitalised in our article on the organisation as well as in its own literature. Is there a reason why you wanted the capitalisation removed?

WP:ALLCAPS Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 16:08, 11 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Sorry to butt in, but WP:ALLCAPS says that acronyms should (generally) be capitalized. Colin M (talk) 20:04, 13 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Burrobert (talk) 13:25, 11 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Progress

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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