Talk:Stefan Vladislav/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: 3family6 (talk · contribs) 19:54, 22 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

Is it reasonably well written?
A. Prose is "clear and concise", without copyvios, or spelling and grammar errors:
No copyvios detected.--3family6 (Talk to me | See what I have done) 01:26, 30 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Much of the prose needs to be improved, both for phrasing and for punctuation use.--3family6 (Talk to me | See what I have done) 01:26, 30 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]

"and Khan Bata (the grandson of Genghis Khan)" - link to Batu Khan, and perhaps call him Batu in this article, since that's what the Wikipedia article on him calls him.--3family6 (Talk to me | See what I have done) 01:26, 30 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Fixed Khan Bata→Batu Khan.--Zoupan 18:28, 3 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]

The following sentences are stand-alone, and thus should be merged into a paragraph: "Jireček thought that Vladislav lived in Skadar.[10]" and "Vladislav died in ca. 1269 and was buried in Mileševa." The first sentence is also fragmentary, and should be expanded.--3family6 (Talk to me | See what I have done) 01:26, 30 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]

B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:
In Accession, one sentence says "some of his nobility revolted in fall 1233." - Because many readers may be in the southern hemisphere, where seasons are the opposite of those in the north, a term such as "late 1233" might be a better word choice. If a month range is given in sources, perhaps use that.--3family6 (Talk to me | See what I have done) 01:26, 30 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]

The "Personality" section has only one sentence, so the section should be deleted and the content moved into another section.--3family6 (Talk to me | See what I have done) 01:26, 30 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]
Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
A. Has an appropriate reference section:
Has a well-formatted reference section.--3family6 (Talk to me | See what I have done) 01:26, 30 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]

B. Citations to reliable sources, where necessary:
"There is a hypothesis that Radoslav even received a part of Serbian land to administrate." - this needs a citation

Whole paragraph cited by Fajfric.--Zoupan 18:34, 3 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]

That's fine. I just wanted to confirm that it was supported by a source.--3family6 (Talk to me | See what I have done) 19:11, 3 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]

"Note that, as Vladislav ruled from 1233 to 1243 and died after 1264, the flag predates the time of the description." - this should have a citation as well.--3family6 (Talk to me | See what I have done) 01:26, 30 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Removed unnecessary (obvious) observation.--Zoupan 18:31, 3 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]

C. No original research:
All content is verifiable.--3family6 (Talk to me | See what I have done) 01:26, 30 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]
Is it broad in its coverage?
A. Major aspects:
Major aspects are addressed, stays broad in scope.--3family6 (Talk to me | See what I have done) 01:26, 30 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]

B. Focused:
Stays focused on the subject, no extraneous detail.--3family6 (Talk to me | See what I have done) 01:26, 30 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]
Is it neutral?
Fair representation without bias:
Fair, neutral presentation.--3family6 (Talk to me | See what I have done) 01:26, 30 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]
Is it stable?
No edit wars, etc:
No disruptive editing since this article was created.--3family6 (Talk to me | See what I have done) 01:26, 30 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]
Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:
Images are properly licensed, though I had to fill out some missing parameters for several.--3family6 (Talk to me | See what I have done) 01:26, 30 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]

B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
Relevant, with suitable captions.--3family6 (Talk to me | See what I have done) 01:26, 30 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]
Overall: Needs some work on the prose.--3family6 (Talk to me | See what I have done) 01:26, 30 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Done.--3family6 (Talk to me | See what I have done) 19:11, 3 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Pass or Fail:
All issues resolved, passed.--3family6 (Talk to me | See what I have done) 19:11, 3 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you! I will continue to have the article improved!--Zoupan 20:38, 3 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]