Talk:Steele's Greenville expedition/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Iazyges (talk · contribs) 11:23, 6 January 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Will take this up. Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 11:23, 6 January 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Criteria

GA Criteria

GA Criteria:

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1.a Y

1.b Y
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2.a Y

2.b Y

2.c Y

2.d Y
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3.a Y

3.b Y
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4.a Y
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6.a Y

6.b Y

No DAB links Y
No dead links Y
No missing citations Y

Discussion

Prose Suggestions

Please note that almost all of these are suggestions, and can be implemented or ignored at your discretion. Any changes I deem necessary for the article to pass GA standards I will bold.

Lede

The Greenville expedition has been given as an example of Union war policy shifting more towards expanding the war to Confederate social and economic structures and the Confederate homefront. somewhat awkward phrasing, perhaps Some historians have suggested that the Greenville expedition represented the Union war policy shifting more towards expanding the war to Confederate social and economic structures and the Confederate homefront.
- Done

Background

Have made some copyedits here. Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 22:17, 7 January 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Expedition

These new regiments were to be led by white officers, and about 500 African-Americans volunteered for the service. perhaps reverse to About 500 African-Americans volunteered for the service, placed in new regiments to be led by white officers.
- Done
Many of the plantations in the area were burned given that they were under orders to burn unpopulated plantations, perhaps a slight change to Many of the inhabited plantations in the area were burned would better explain the deviancy from orders?
- Unfortunately, the sources aren't direct about this. The ignoring of orders not to bother peaceable civilians also involved random plundering (one source mentions them locking people up in rooms while they stole stuff)
@Hog Farm: that is all of my suggestions, passing now. Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 22:29, 7 January 2023 (UTC)[reply]