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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 07:24, 7 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]


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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()
3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()
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Has been a while since you've had a GAN up for review, but I will take on this due to your timely responses in the past on strong articles! --K. Peake 07:24, 7 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox and lead

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  • The single is not mentioned as being released in 1996 like the infobox claims; write this out in the body
  • "to Capitol Records in mid-1995." → "to Capitol in mid-1995 for further releases."
  • "bassist Mitch Porter who" → "bassist Mitch Porter, who"
  • Wikilink Encinitas, California
  • "acted as producers." → "acted as producers for the album."
  • Target pop punk to Pop-punk
  • "Static Prevails was promoted with a mini US tour," → "it was promoted with a mini tour of the country," since you write "US" later in this sentence
  • "with Smoking Popes" → "with the Smoking Popes"
  • Mention the release date of the lead single once you have sourced it
Annoyingly, the full date isn't known, so I went with the year (which I've now sourced). Yeepsi (talk) 13:27, 7 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]
No issue with that. --K. Peake 13:49, 7 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Static Prevails met with mixed reviews" → "The album received mixed reviews"
  • "with comments on" → "who mostly commented on"

Background and development

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  • "Jimmy Eat World released their self-titled debut album" → "Jimmy Eat World released their self-titled debut studio album"
  • "promoters,and venues to book shows across the country." → "promoters, and venues to book shows across the United States."
  • "contacted the band asking" → "contacted the band and asked"
  • "check out Sense Field, however," → "check out Sense Field; however,"
  • "could hear. The band mentioned" → "could hear, with the band responding by mentioning"
  • "a staff member at Capitol Records" → "a staff member at Capitol"
  • "had known since the seventh grade, replaced him." → "had been best friends with since the seventh grade, replaced Porter." since the source mentions that specifically

Production

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  • Retitle to Recording and production
  • "to record their forthcoming album," → "to record 'Static Prevails,"
  • Wikilink record label
  • Wikilink 7" vinyl per MOS:LINK2SECT
  • "new songs, and rework others guided" → "new songs and rewrite others, being guided"
  • Wikilink Mesa, Arizona
  • "at Big Fish, in Encinitas, California." → "at Big Fish in Encinitas, California." with the wikilink
  • "who had previously produced" → "who had previously produced for"
  • "Jimmy Eat World were" → "the band were"
  • Add a source at the end of the sentence to confirm the band as producers because [7] does not directly mention this
  • ""Seventeen" it initially featured the chorus lyric "You're only seventeen"," → ""Seventeen", it initially featured the chorus line "You're only seventeen";" with the target
  • "mixed almost all the tracks, except" → "mixed all of the tracks, apart from" with the target
  • "with assistant engineer Cappy Japngie." → "with Cappy Japngie serving as an assistant engineer."
  • "Captiol insisted Rothrock and Schnapf mix these tracks" → "Captiol Records insisted on Rothrock and Schnapf mixing the tracks"
  • "to send the songs" → "to send them"
  • "mastered the recordings at Precision Mastering" → "mastered all of the recordings at Precision Mastering, while" with the target

Composition

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  • "from the band's" → "from Jimmy Eat World's"
  • Target pop punk to Pop-punk
  • Mention Rocket from the Crypt as well as NOFX and J Church 10
  • [11] should be directly before [12] since refs should come after punctuation
  • "still very powerful."" → "still very powerful"." per MOS:QUOTE
  • "Unlike their previous album," → "Unlike the band's previous album,"
  • The participation of the members being split on the other records is not sourced
  • "the accordion, and" → "the accordion and"
  • "Kidd played an" → "while Kidd played an"
  • "The opening track "Thinking, That's All" and" → "The opening track, "Thinking, That's All", and"
  • "were screamo-esque songs," → "are screamo-esque songs,"
  • "evoked Texas Is the Reason" → "evokes Texas Is the Reason"
  • ""Call It in the Air" with its punk-esque sound earned it a" → ""Call It in the Air", with its punk-esque sound, earned a"
  • Remove wikilink on Sense Field
  • "Tracks Like "Seventeen"," → "Tracks such as "Seventeen","
  • Target indie label to Independent record label
  • "on their split" → "following Jimmy Eat World's split" but are you sure this shouldn't be in the following section?
The early version of "Digits" is from the split mentioned in the Background section; I just put it here as something to say about the song. Yeepsi (talk) 13:27, 7 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "The closing track "Anderson Mesa" features" → "The closing track, "Anderson Mesa", features"
  • Target string arrangement to String section

Release and promotion

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  • "After handing in the finished album," → "After the band handed in Static Prevails,"
  • ""bummed ... Just guys" → ""bummed [...] Just guys" since this how you represent skipping part of a quote
  • "toured the west coast in anticipation of their new album" → "toured the West Coast of the US in anticipation of the album"
  • "Capitol Records released Static Prevails" → "Capitol released Static Prevails"
  • Target Denver, Colorado to Denver
  • Target vinyl to Phonograph record
  • Should it be "featured" and "included", or is the vinyl version still available?
This particular version (with the different artwork) isn't available anymore; later versions used the CD artwork (the one in the infobox). Yeepsi (talk) 13:27, 7 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • Target CD to Compact disc
  • Target B-side to A-side and B-side
  • "along the west coast; later the band" → "along the West; later, the band"
  • "with Smoking Popes and" → "with the Smoking Popes and"
  • "the band embarked on" → "Jimmy Eat World embarked on"
  • "Capitol Records felt the" → "Capitol felt the"
  • "would work in the movie" → "would work in the film"
  • Mention that Clarity is their third studio album
  • Wikilink bonus tracks per MOS:LINK2SECT
  • Mention that Futures is Jimmy Eat World's fifth studio album

Reception

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  • Ratings box looks good
  • Fix MOS:QUOTE issues throughout this section
  • "Mike DaRonco stated," → "Mike DaRonco stated that"
  • "It had" → "According to him, the album has"
  • Mention the name of The New Rolling Stone Album Guide reviewer; if not known, identify as the staff
  • "said it was" → "called it"
  • "meant ironically" as" → "meant ironically", as"
  • "The music" → "In his eyes, the music"
  • "Michael Carriere views" → "Michael Carriere viewed"
  • Identify the name of The A.V. Club writer

Track listing

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Personnel

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  • Good

References

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  • Good

Final comments and verdict

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Done. Yeepsi (talk) 13:27, 7 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]
✓ Pass time, you got to it in under an hour; top job as expected! --K. Peake 13:49, 7 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]
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