Talk:State communications in the Neo-Assyrian Empire/GA1

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Reviewer: QatarStarsLeague (talk · contribs) 20:58, 14 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]

I'll review. QatarStarsLeague (talk) 20:58, 14 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]

I think the opening sentence should refer less to the patrons of the network and be more descriptive. Take Interstate Highway System for example. The first sentence reads "...is a network of controlled-access highways that forms...". The current first sentence for this article should maybe become the second.

Hmm good idea but I'm not sure how to achieve that. I tried drafting several sentence that describes what the system consisted of, but none sounds reasonable enough to me. Do you have an idea? HaEr48 (talk) 02:53, 17 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]

- On further review, I think it is fine as is. Other similar articles use the same structure. QatarStarsLeague (talk) 22:26, 21 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Though it doesn't necessarily need to go, the definition of mules probably is a bit redundant once you've already linked to the article on mules.

I'd rather the reader doesn't have to click a link to find out what mules mean, especially given that it can be explained in a short sentence. HaEr48 (talk) 02:53, 17 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Is the term kalliu Assyrian as well?

Yes, clarified that in the lead. HaEr48 (talk) 02:53, 17 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Was the highway system innovation adopted from the Romans', or did it come about separately?

The Neo-Assyrian Empire existed several centuries before the Roman Empire, so it was not adopted from the Romans. The "History" section describes that it's an original innovation by the Assyrians.

Great article, not sure much else is needed. Just some slight changes. QatarStarsLeague (talk) 02:25, 16 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]

@QatarStarsLeague: Thanks for the review! HaEr48 (talk) 02:53, 17 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]