Talk:Star Wars: The Rise of Skywalker/GA1
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Reviewer: Some Dude From North Carolina (talk · contribs) 23:51, 14 March 2021 (UTC)
Hey, I'm going to be reviewing this article. Expect comments by the end of the week. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 23:51, 14 March 2021 (UTC)
Infobox and lead
[edit]- Non-free use rationale for the poster is in great shape!
- In the infobox, why do the editors, along with the cinematographer need references?
- Done removed Chompy Ace 23:56, 15 March 2021 (UTC)
- The theatrical poster doesn't include any "Story by" credits, so that needs references.
- Done added with the BFI Chompy Ace 23:56, 15 March 2021 (UTC)
- "Screenplay by" should be "Written by" per the theatrical poster credits.
- For writing, J. J. Abrams is credited before Chris Terrio on the poster.
- In the second paragraph, the use of "score" feels repetitive.
- The use of "although" and then "and turned" sounds off, maybe change the latter to "it turned".
- "and it turned" → "it turned
- "last time" → "last time for the franchise" or something similar
Plot
[edit]- Remove the comma after "nearby".
- Remove the comma after "on the Falcon".
- Plot is under 700 words, so that passes WP:FILMPLOT.
Cast
[edit]- "include:" → "include"
- Everything thing else looks good.
Production
[edit]- The reference after "May 24, 2019" isn't working.
- Done removed Chompy Ace 23:58, 15 March 2021 (UTC)
- A source is needed for filming being "pushed back to August".
- Not done removed Chompy Ace 23:58, 15 March 2021 (UTC)
- "The Hollywood Reporter reported" seems repetitive.
- "The next day" - You never mentioned the original date.
- The reference after "to December 20, 2019" isn't working.
- Done removed Chompy Ace 23:58, 15 March 2021 (UTC)
- What is the purpose of the note after "complete the story"?
- Done removed Chompy Ace 23:58, 15 March 2021 (UTC)
Marketing
[edit]- In this section, and in the rest of the article, change "Star Wars Celebration" to "the Star Wars Celebration".
- Add a comma after "December 18, 2019".
- "and was released" → "and were released"
- "cancelled" → "canceled"
- The last sentence in the section makes it seem like "the same day" refers to December 14, so try rewording.
- Not done per WP:TRAILER Chompy Ace 23:58, 15 March 2021 (UTC)
Release
[edit]- Both subsections here look good.
Reception
[edit]- Remove the comma after "$300 million".
- Add a comma after "October 21, 2019".
- "$205 million" → "$200 million" (source used)
- Add a comma after "third weekend".
- I would use this reference for the Thursday night previews.
- Done added Chompy Ace 23:53, 15 March 2021 (UTC)
- What is the purpose of the following sentence?: "however, Deadline Hollywood did write that "we can't ignore" the less than stellar audience exit scores, which could affect the film's legs moving forward". Also, why is it written in present tense?
- Done removed Chompy Ace 23:53, 15 March 2021 (UTC)
- Update Rotten Tomatoes.
- "33%" → "32%" (source used)
- What is the category sorting rule in the award table? Try to make it consistent (importance, alphabetical order, etc.)
- Already done alphabetical order Chompy Ace 23:53, 15 March 2021 (UTC)
References
[edit]- Every single source is archived.
- Link Den of Geek and don't put it in italics per consistency.
- The reference after "November 25, 2019" is missing a website (Screen Rant).
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