Talk:Stade Roland Garros/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: KnowIG (talk) 23:29, 22 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for criteria)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
Lead should be 3 paragraphs, although maybe short enough for 2 paragraphs
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
Pretty sure that Gem is a fan site. Location section completly unsourced. Tenniseum and clay courts relies on one source, could be a copyvio. Too many unsourced things. And another is to a ticket site. Since when has Wiki been adverts. Also one to a blog not from a journalist. World Stadiums.com is a bit of a fan site, don't think it's totally reliable.
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
Too much player info imo. This is about the stadia not the players
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Is there not a shot showing the whole complex. Also if not shouldn't PC be the court in the picture and not SL.
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

Out of date in expansion v relocation as a result has been announced.

Comments on above

For whatever it's worth:

A failing grade for writing quality, based solely on the lead being 2 paragraphs instead of 3?
When GA criteria make no mention of how many paragraphs need to be in the lead? Really?

Look at MOS. Depending on lengh. I think this may be able to get away with 2 but double check MOS.

As a professional writer, I happen to think it's pretty well-written (though I do have a bit of bias in that regard).

Please cite specific examples of poorly-written prose.
Please cite examples of factual inaccuracies.
Ticket site cited to source number of seats in stadium -- also sources venue location, BTW (see below).

Or you could use this reliable source 1 2 And I would have thought that the size be mentioned in the whole leaving RG or not stuff.

Gem is not a fan site. Other sites reliable & verifiable.

And why does the venue's location need to be sourced? It's not like there's controversy over where it is.

This is wikipedia not a fan site....

However, I'll work on extra sources if others think this is a valid criticism.
How do you discuss a historic tennis venue without some mention of players who made the venue historic?
Those asides are in no way the focus of the article.
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No, there is no non-copyrighted photo of the complex as a whole -- at least none I could find.
Expansion/relocation info has been updated -- although the issue is by no means settled. DoctorJoeE (talk) 15:09, 24 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]

May I suggest a read of the All England Club and seeing how that is and thinking about trying to make this article more like that if you get what I'm getting at. KnowIG (talk) 15:22, 24 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Sure, be happy to, but I'd still like some examples of what you feel is poorly written, or inaccurate, or both. DoctorJoeE (talk) 15:35, 24 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Hmm -- in reviewing the All England Club article -- are you saying we should include a section on the French Open, even though there is a separate article for that? I'm not sure padding the history would be an improvement, but I'll look into it. Still need to know what writing you feel is sub-par. DoctorJoeE (talk) 23:49, 27 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Aircorns Review

The original reviewer is currently blocked and if the nominator agrees I am willing to continue with the review. AIRcorn (talk) 06:38, 30 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I have considered the previous reviewers points and the answers above and tend to agree with most issues they raise. I have also compared this to other stadium articles and while it is one of the better tennis stadium articles I unfortunately feel it doesn't reach the standard set by Stadium Good Articles. ~~I also feel it would take too much effort to get it up to the required standard in seven days. I suggest addressing the points below and then getting a Peer Review and trying again.~~ Regards AIRcorn (talk) 05:29, 4 April 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I have decided to change it to holding as I was mistaken about the seven day time limit and the author wishes to address the points. I also exceeded the criteria in some of my comments (specifics here). Most of these are easy fixes and I think would improve the article, but will not need to be completed for this article to pass.AIRcorn (talk) 09:26, 7 April 2011 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for criteria)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

I am fine with the lead being two paragraphs, although the second one is very short. However, the lead should be a summary of the article. Ideally nothing should appear in it that is not mentioned elsewhere in the article. Apart from the Tenniseum nothing in the lead is in the body. I left some examples below of sentences I found problematic (most come from the first section).

While the Roland Garros surface is invariably characterized as "red clay", the courts are in fact surfaced with white limestone, frosted with a few millimeters of powdered red brick dust

Should the second comma be an "and" or "that is"?

"in fact" is redundent

Beneath the 3-inch-thick layer of porous limestone is 6 inches of volcanic rock, followed by a 3-foot (0.91 m) layer of sand, all of which rests on a slab of concrete.

use the Template:convert (or enter by hand) metric and imperial measurements for each measurement (don't care which are in brackets, as long as it is consistent)

3-inch-thick - thick is redundant

Sentence seems clunky could it be reworded. (Suggest moving the 3-inch up a sentence and re-wording "Most courts are layered, below the limestone is six inches of volcanic rock and three foot of sand on a concrete slab.

The red brick dust is replaced as needed (daily, during major tournaments).

Why is there a comma after daily? Does it mean it is done both daily and during major tournaments or is it only done daily during main tournaments.

The surface was a state-of-the art solution, in 1928, to the biggest problem with natural clay courts: poor drainage. At the time, it was not unusual for clay surfaces to be unplayable for two to three days after even short periods of precipitation.

Suggest rewriting and switching these sentences, talk about the problem and then the solution

The limestone/crushed brick combination

Avoid using "/", could be replaced with "and"

Also all numbers under ten should be written out, there should be no single sentence paragraphs, the location section should be written in prose and the court names should not be bolded (I would consider linking via a main template as articles exist for each court)

Should the translations contain "the"? e.g. (the "Great Lady") (the "Four Musketeers")

It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

Location section needs to be sourced. It doesn't matter if it is not controversial, all information needs to be verifiable. Non-controversial stuff can be sourced to a primary source for a GA.
The NY times source says "Most courts at Roland Garros are constructed of several layers of materials", while this article seems to imply they all are.

Not sure where the three-feet of sand comes from either

Could articles available on the web be linked in the references
The surface was a state-of-the art solution, in 1928, to the biggest problem with natural clay courts: poor drainage

The year 1928 refers to an American court being built in Xsport [1] and the same article says clay courts were made with crushed brick in 1909

All websites refs need retreival dates and similar formatting (e.g Tenniseum and World Tennis Magazine's all caps title)
Probably too many Primary Sources are used, as there must be reliable secondary sources out there covering the same information. However as most appear to cover relatively uncontroversial facts they may be acceptable.

It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):

I feel it needs a history section or at least more info covering the early history
Information about the French open and Roland Garros (aviator) should be expanded.
The last few sentences in the second paragraph of playing surfaces go into too much details about clay surfaces in general. One or two sentences should suffice (especially if it is merged somewhat into a history section.
There may be a bit too much info about some players and matches, in particular at the end of court 1. "The famous dropped pants match" sounds like trivia. If they are important for the stadiums names (like the Musketeers) then I feel the level of detail is about right.

It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:

The surface was a state-of-the art solution. "State-of-the art" sounds a bit peacocky, plus I could not find a mention in either of the two references
The tennisium section reads like an advert -- Tours are conducted daily. (Two per day, at 11:00am and 3:00pm, are in English.)

It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail: