Talk:St John of God Pinelodge Clinic

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This edit request by an editor with a conflict of interest was declined.

Update reference to St John of God Health Care to read: St John of God Health Care is one of the largest Catholic providers of health care services in Australia.^[1]

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AnneGartner (talk) 08:58, 5 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Hi AnneGartner, and thank you for the suggestion. I am declining this edit request for two reasons. First, the claim that your hospital network is the largest in Australia needs to supported by an independent source. I can't just take your organization's word for it. Second, labeling a hospital network the "largest" is vague and ambiguous. St John could be the largest by hospital beds, by expenditures, or by number of doctors; but the point is, Wikipedia articles should avoid using vaguely positive terms when more specific descriptions would do better.Altamel (talk) 19:30, 5 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Talk page watchers, please see a relevant discussion at WP:COIN. Altamel (talk) 19:30, 5 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]

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